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Ranquiv

  • Nominated by: Samonic Signatureicon (he/him) 10:14, 16 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 17:44, 17 April 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 792 words (182 introduction, 595 body, 15 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 729 words (169 introduction, 545 body, 15 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:CHISS WP:NOVELS

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

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Support

  1. ACvote Commander Code-8 Hello There! 07:57, 16 April 2023 (UTC)
  2. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 17:46, 16 April 2023 (UTC)
  3. ACvote —spookywillowwtalk 14:51, 17 April 2023 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 17:15, 17 April 2023 (UTC)
  5. BloodOfIriziSabine Starbird(Syndicure) 17:40, 17 April 2023 (UTC)

Object

CC-8
  • The species note in the infobox should be merged so that it only uses one reference
  • First sentence of the second body paragraph could maybe be broken up, I find it a tad hard to follow
  • "Ranquiv asked them if they could calibrate Caldorf and Regginis Mol interceptor missile as a test, as the latter model's construction had stopped twenty years ago." I'm getting the vibe of what happened here but it should be clearer exactly how and why Ranquiv was testing Han and Leia.
    • The book doesn't really say more than what the article says, but reworded slightly. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 12:24, 13 April 2023 (UTC)
  • I think the article could be clearer on what Han and Leia were doing on Poln Major, and I'm curious if they were posing as workers or something under their aliases Commander Code-8 Hello There! 11:57, 13 April 2023 (UTC)
    • I don't think their mission is relevant to Ranquiv, a Storm-hair commander, so I'm not going to mention what they were doing there, it has nothing to do with Ranquiv or the Chosen, and I think the article is fine without mentioning what they were doing. (If you're curious, though, they were on Poln Minor because the system's governor had allied himself with the Rebel Alliance, promising them a base on Poln Minor. General Cracken sent Solo and other Rebels to Poln Minor to see if establishing a base there was a "good idea" and to prove that the governor actually wanted to ally himself with the Rebels.) They weren't posing as anyone, but expanded slightly. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 12:24, 13 April 2023 (UTC)
  • Not sure what "finished to the cavern" means
    • Seems like I messed up something when I addressed your objections, fixed. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 07:33, 14 April 2023 (UTC)
  • An explanation of why Han and Leia decided/needed to escape would be beneficial. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 02:04, 14 April 2023 (UTC)
    • Reworded. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 07:33, 14 April 2023 (UTC)
      • Still isn't clear why they needed to escape at that time. I know they aren't the focus of the article but for me, as someone who hasn't read the novel, it's confusing to see the characters suddenly changing the course of their actions and it would be an easier read if that was explained. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 01:34, 15 April 2023 (UTC)
Uber
  • "While they did so, Ranquiv's troops walked toward the Rebels, who feared that they would not be able to leave the cavern without the Chosen commander's permission, commandeering a Whisperlike and moving to escape" Not sure who's commandeering the Whisperlike. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 17:40, 16 April 2023 (UTC)
spookly
  • Perhaps sliding one or two more sentences into the personality would be good for an article of this length. I see it mentioned that he was feared, perhaps that be slid in somehow?—spookywillowwtalk 00:02, 17 April 2023 (UTC)
    • The body mentions that, so I don't think repeating information is a good idea. Anyways, they feared they couldn't get out without his permission, they didn't fear him. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 07:29, 17 April 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 17:43, 17 April 2023 (UTC)