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Quell system

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  1. ACvote Imperators II(Talk) 09:47, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
  2. ACvote JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 03:37, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Zed42 (talk) 06:40, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
  4. LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 07:25, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
  5. Dentface (talk) 07:58, 7 January 2022 (UTC)

Object

Macaroni
  • I think we should avoid saying "the X system was a star system." None of Imp's many system status articles do it.
    • I'm aware of this.
      • Never said you weren't, just pointing it out.
  • Is the system named in its first appearance? Asking because there's no 1stID and there isn't any quote from the episode with its name. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 05:42, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
    • In the opening newsreel. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 14:18, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
      • I think that warrants a mention in the bts, then. The reader might also be confused as to where the name is coming from. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 00:19, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
Zed
  • "...the Quell system was heavily contested by both of the warring factions' forces, including the Confederacy's Providence-class Dreadnought Lucid Voice, which had also taken part in the contentions that took place within the star system." I'm not sure if I'm misunderstanding something here, but isn't the "which had also taken part in the contentions..." bit sort of redundant to the first part of the quoted text, which already establishes that the Lucid Voice was present?
    • Is that what you're talking about.
  • I think the BTS detail on Quell regarding the battle originally being in space and later being moved closer to the planet is relevant information to include here. Zed42 (talk) 03:43, 3 December 2021 (UTC)
Imp
  • Please try and condense the intro; two intro paragraphs looks too long for a 3.5-paragraph body. The description of the battle is probably where you can cut back on the details the most.
    • How's that?
  • "During the war,[1] in 21 BBY,[4] the upper atmosphere of Quell served as the site of a battle between the Republic task force of Venator-class Star Destroyers led by Jedi General Aayla Secura, who was engaged by the T-series military strategic analysis and tactics droid TF-1726 and his squadron of Separatist Munificent-class star frigates.[1]" — you should use either "between X and Y" or "X was engaged by Y", mixing both phrasing approaches doesn't really work here grammatically.
    • Fixed with some help from Battles that Changed the Galaxy.
  • "Although the Battle of Quell was an unqualified victory for the Confederacy, the campaign revealed that the Republic had struggled to maintain control in the Outer Rim, a region where acts of separatism had flourished." — I'm assuming this is coming from a later historian perspective - any timeline info for when this evaluation of the Battle of Quell occurred? Also, is the emphasis supposed to be on "Republic had struggled" as in "Republic did try to do something about it" (in which case connecting the two clauses with the contrasting "although" makes sense), or on "Republic had struggled" as in "Republic really had problems with this" (in which case the two clauses aren't really contrasting)? Imperators II(Talk) 09:04, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Not sure what you mean by a historian's perspective, the source only mentions that the Battle of Quell was an unqualified Separatist victory that underscored how the Republic's ultimate victory in the Clone Wars wasn't going to be easy or certain. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 00:30, 4 January 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 10:01, 7 January 2022 (UTC)