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Quano
- Nominated by: Nighthawk205You've got some splainin' to do... 20:00, August 5, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: My first nomination. He's a character that's only mentioned in three chapters of Darth Bane: Dynasty of Evil, but still pretty interesting.
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Karypyshyn is pretty good
"Pommat told her of his spice smuggling business, although he revealed that he had not hidden any stores on her ship, because he didn't have any contacts on Ciutric IV." Some of this info is not really relevant. Could you just say something like "Pommat told her of his spice smuggling business, and revealed that he was aware that she had come from Ciutric IV." which then ties in with the next sentence better. Not bad for a first article. I may have another objection or two later, but overall, pretty nice.Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:23, August 11, 2010 (UTC)- Done. Didn't really think about it as critically before, but that info is much better suited in the main area, not the top summary.Nighthawk205You've got some splainin' to do... 15:03, August 11, 2010 (UTC)
- I haven't read DoE since it came out, so I didn't remember the stuff that Obi-Wan noticed, but I'll support once his objections are fixed. Chack Jadson (Talk) 01:02, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
- Done. Didn't really think about it as critically before, but that info is much better suited in the main area, not the top summary.Nighthawk205You've got some splainin' to do... 15:03, August 11, 2010 (UTC)
Jacobi
- Just some things regarding the content:
- Shouldn't it be mentioned that he was "one of only a handful of nonhumans who chose to try to make a living on Doan", and that his very broken-down and dirty cantina didn't have a name?
- He greeted Set Harth by telling him that the bar was for miners only and told him to leave, but after Set showed him the credits and asked to talk with him alone, he closed the cantina and abandoned the uninviting attitude.
- Quano helps miners sell things offworld.
- Quano did not want to take Set to the miners.
- He asked for two-thousand credits to bring Set to the miners, but settled for seven-hundred.
- After finding out that Set had the credits on him, and after offering Set a celebratory drink, Quano tried to kill Set and take his credits—and failed. I realise you've mentioned this bit, but I think it could be made more in-depth.
- After Set killed Quano's bodyguards, Quano came out of hiding and Set scarred Quano's face with his lightsaber. This finally persuaded Quano to bring Set to the miners who had the artifact.
- There may be other things. I just think you should take another look through chapters 6 and 7 and make sure you have included every little piece of information about Quano, including his fear, reluctance to bring Set and Zannah to anyone, and about Zannah manipulating his mind through the Force etc. But that's all. Good job :). —Obi–wan Jacobi
(Talk) 00:29, August 24, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
Vote to remove nomination (AC only)
Objections older than two weeks. -- 1358 (Talk) 11:54, September 7, 2010 (UTC)- Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 12:39, September 7, 2010 (UTC) - Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:58, September 7, 2010 (UTC)
