Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Planet Prison

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Planet Prison

• Nominated by: Cade Calrayn 19:35, August 9, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Welcome to the age of superweapons.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Still better than Nuclear technology. Good work, Cade. Winterz (talk) 21:18, August 9, 2012 (UTC)
2. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 00:29, August 21, 2012 (UTC)
3. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 08:29, September 12, 2012 (UTC)
4. CC7567 ^(talk) 19:13, September 14, 2012 (UTC)
5. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 02:25, September 15, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Exiledjedi

• Since Jonkan was a scientist working on the project, perhaps you should mention him in the Origins section as a scientist that worked on the project.
  • Done.
• "Darth Angral, the commander of the Sith forces who had led the Sacking of Coruscant..." I thought that Moff Rycus Kilran lead the Sith forces against Coruscant.
  • Actually, Angral led the Imperial forces during the Sacking. See The Old Republic, Threat of Peace Act 1: Treaty of Coruscant. Kilran got the title, but I believe it's because he probably designed the attack plans. Angral, Malgus, and Adraas led the Sacking.
    • I see.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 18:17, August 13, 2012 (UTC)
• Could you mention the Planet Prison's appearance as part of the Desolator in the BTS, to show that the weapon played a larger role?
  • Done.
• Shouldn't Var Suthra be in the creators field of the infobox since he thought of the idea?
  • I don't believe Suthra thought of the idea, actually. All the general says is that he commissioned the project alongside the Shock Drum, Power Guard Project, and the Death Mark. Do you think that's enough for him to be credited with the idea?
    • No, I think it should be fine.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 18:17, August 13, 2012 (UTC)
• "However, Tarnis was in fact the son of Darth Angral, the commander of the Sith forces who had led the Sacking of Coruscant, and Tarnis was masquerading as a scientist to gather information." This sentence seems a little awkward. Could you reword it?
  • Fixed.
• Could you add the affiliaton of the planet Uphrades?
  • Sorry, I don't understand. Do you mean "Known locations?" Because the weapon itself didn't appear, the Desolator did.
    • I was hoping you could specify whether it was a Republic world or neutral.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 18:17, August 13, 2012 (UTC)
      • Done.
• "However, the Desolator also inherited the Planet Prison's power drawbacks, requiring the weapon to charge for extended periods of time, and that weakness enabled the Knight, T7, and Carsen to slip aboard the Oppressor above the planet Tython and disable it before it could fire again." Kind of a junp from Uphrades, could you provide a sentence of lead up to this saying that Angral decided to use the weapon against Tython. Also, perhaps you should mention that it was where many Jedi were located.
  • Added a little more context.
• "...although the Jedi Knight defeated Angral aboard his warship above Tython just before the ship was destroyed by Republic fighters." This part of the intro should be mentioned in the body as well.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:02, August 13, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 17:41, August 13, 2012 (UTC)
• Please specify why Angral wants revenge. (I know why, but other people might not.)--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 18:18, August 13, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 23:15, August 20, 2012 (UTC)

Cav

• Is an article for the prototype itself warranted?
  • Not really. There was only ever one Planet Prison device, and it was the prototype.
• Article for theft of design plans?
  • Done.
• And the raid on the military warehouse?
  • Actually, looking at the conversation files, they're the same event. The thieves got the files from the military warehouse.
• You state Uphrades was "destroyed", but a medical team managed to land on the surface to aid survivors. This kind of defeats the definition of "destroyed." Alderaan was destroyed and it ended up in little pieces. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 11:34, September 4, 2012 (UTC)
  • Fixed to "devastate", like the Devastation of Uphrades. Cade Calrayn 22:36, September 5, 2012 (UTC)

Attack of the Clone

• The Cold War and the Sith Empire lack mentions in the body, while the Republic needs to be properly introduce. Please rectify.
  • Done.
• Not an objection (and up to you), but I would suggest referring to T7 by his full designation for formality throughout the article.
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 19:09, September 14, 2012 (UTC)
• Linking was a bit poor in some places. Please try to watch it more next time. CC7567 ^(talk) 19:03, September 14, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

• Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:25, September 15, 2012 (UTC)