Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Phatrong

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Phatrong

• Nominated by: AV-6R7^{Crew Pit} 06:39, September 1, 2016 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Revisiting one of my previous nominations.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. The bit about Embo doesn't feel like it belongs anywhere. :/ Imperators II^(Talk) 16:01, September 1, 2016 (UTC)
2. Cwedin^(talk) 07:18, September 12, 2016 (UTC)
3. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 05:38, October 17, 2016 (UTC)
4. Cevan (talk) 00:38, December 1, 2016 (UTC)
5. 1358 ^(Talk) 13:38, April 25, 2017 (UTC)

Object

Imperators II

• "Inhabitants" was in desperate need of a paragraph break. I guess Tope would say you should subsection it now. :P Imperators II^(Talk) 06:44, September 1, 2016 (UTC)
  • Of course; I'll handle that tomorrow (aka when I get up). I'll also see if I can reorganize any of the info or add some to help the flow. - AV-6R7^{Crew Pit} 06:48, September 1, 2016 (UTC)
    • Done. - AV-6R7^{Crew Pit} 15:39, September 1, 2016 (UTC)
• Intro should include words about the planet's description and its government (and maybe affiliation).
  • Done. - AV-6R7^{Crew Pit} 15:39, September 1, 2016 (UTC)
• "Though they weren't monolithic some regions had more traditional structures with integrated militaries clovocs were common in several of the largest nations." - what's happening here?
  • Semi-colons are my friends. - AV-6R7^{Crew Pit} 07:07, September 1, 2016 (UTC)
    • Now it's unclear as to who "they" are: "Though they weren't monolithic;" Just go sleep already, AV. :P Imperators II^(Talk) 07:10, September 1, 2016 (UTC)
      • Commas are cool, too. - AV-6R7^{Crew Pit} 07:16, September 1, 2016 (UTC)
• This article names Ekaqume a "house" while its own article identifies it as a clovoc. Which one is correct? (Currently, the first sentence of Locations contrasts "houses" and clovocs.)
  • Fixed. - AV-6R7^{Crew Pit} 07:07, September 1, 2016 (UTC)
• Last sentence of Locations is a bit longish. Can you rework it? Maybe put some of the info in Inhabitants? Imperators II^(Talk) 07:04, September 1, 2016 (UTC)
  • Done. - AV-6R7^{Crew Pit} 15:39, September 1, 2016 (UTC)

Floyd

• As per the Layout Guide, this article needs a History section. A lot of the information in Inhabitants would fit; as such, this article is going to need to be reworked rather thoroughly. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 02:59, September 13, 2016 (UTC)
  • I shuffled some info around if you want to take a look. - AV-6R7^{Crew Pit} 00:14, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

The Brave Goldfish

• That bit about Embo really doesn't belong there. Also, the proposed quote from the comments could be added. Despite that it's a perfect article. - The Brave Goldfish (talk) 18:35, October 26, 2016 (EET)
  • Please note that what is provided in the comment section below is not an allowable quote for the article body per the Manual of Style. Imperators II^(Talk) 16:54, October 26, 2016 (UTC)
    • Oh, OK, so only Embo's bit should be edited. - The Brave Goldfish (talk) 11:26, October 27, 2016 (EET)
      • The Embo bit is relevant to the subject, so it should stay, even if it does seem out of place. - AV-6R7^{Crew Pit} 08:29, October 29, 2016 (UTC)
        • Alright, Empo's bit can be kept. - The Brave Goldfish (talk) 11:58, October 29, 2016 (EET)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 13:38, April 25, 2017 (UTC)

• Is there a quote available, or is the indirect mention within the prose? - Cwedin^(talk) 07:13, September 12, 2016 (UTC)
  • Prose: "He was a Kyuzo, a species that originated from a gravity-heavy world." - AV-6R7^{Crew Pit} 07:16, September 12, 2016 (UTC)