Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Peragus II

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Peragus II

  • Nominated by: --Darth tom (talk) 13:00, 16 November 2008 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I feel it meets the requirements.

(0 AC/6 users/6 total)

Support

  1. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 08:47, 18 November 2008 (UTC)
  2. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 12:10, 18 November 2008 (UTC)
  3. Good work. QuiGonJinnThe ability to speak does not make you intelligent.Quigonheadshot 14:11, 18 November 2008 (UTC)
  4. Jedimca0(Do or Do Not, There is No Try) 17:55, 18 November 2008 (UTC)
  5. IFYLOFD (And now, young Skywalker, you will die.) 03:58, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
  6. Qui-Gon Reborn(The ability to speak doesn't make you intelligent.)

Object

  1. Grand Moff Tranner:
    • Some sentences and parts of sentences are not referenced.
    • Perhaps a picture of the mining facility, and maybe even one of the asteroid field exploding during the Ebon Hawk's escape. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 15:35, 16 November 2008 (UTC)
      • I added an image, of the Ebon Hawk during it's escape. I'll address the sourcing soon. --Darth tom (talk) 15:53, 16 November 2008 (UTC)
  2. From Jedimca0
  3. SoresuMakashi
    • Another quote maybe?
    • Expand on the Peragus Mining Facility's destruction in the intro. Why was it destroyed? SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 05:19, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
      • Added to the introduction, as requested. I did add a quote, however very few quotes refer to the Mining Facility, and even fewer to the planet itself, so this was a general quote from Kreia upon the Station.. --Darth tom (talk) 17:42, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
        • I thought there were a few Atton quotes lying around, especially in the scene where he first meets the Exile in the detention block. Maybe I'm just mistaken. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 08:47, 18 November 2008 (UTC)
  4. Toprawa:
    • The article should conform to the Layout Guide's style for planet articles, including all relevant sections. Please add the appropriate sections and information to the article. You may use any of our current planet FAs/GAs as models. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:58, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
      • I added a 'Description' and 'Locations' section, as per the Layout guide, however as Peragus is somewhat lacking in inhabitants, I didn't include that one. --Darth tom Imperial Emblem (Imperial Intelligence) 14:29, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
    • This needs some kind of greater context. What asteroid field? Was the asteroid field created as a result of its destruction? Also, a stray blast from what? From Sion? Don't assume the reader knows anything: "a stray blast in the field detonating the asteroid field"
      • I'm still confused about the asteroid field. What asteroid field? The nearby Peragus asteroid field? Why not specify, if so? Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:25, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
    • Ok, I'm confused. The infobox claims Peragus II is uninhabitable, but you say there is the mining facility on the planet, home to miners. How are they then surviving on the planet? Something should be explained in the Description section explaining the world is uninhabitable - perhaps adding onto what you have written to say, "...ravaged the world uninhabitable"? The next objection may tie into this one.
    • Going along with that, you say the mining facility is located on the exterior of the world. What does that mean, exactly? Is the facility raised high up in the atmosphere? Is it in orbit? Please explain this: "on the exterior of the planet."
    • This information in the Description section should instead be worked into the Locations section. It seems like you can also glean an Inhabitants section out of this to explain that, as I'm inferring from this, that there are no inhabitants, only Human miners: "with Peragus II also being devoid of any sort of Human settlements other than the Peragus Mining Facility"
    • Your referencing needs some serious work. There's no need to specify conversations between people and the like. Just list the source.
    • Please handle these objections to the first section, and I will continue my review. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:16, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
  5. NaruHina!
    • "The only inhabitants of the planet Peragus II resided in the residential Peragus Mining Facility, with the inhabitants of the Facility being composed of many species, mostly humans such as the Medical, Dock, Maintenance security and Administration Officers, although there were some other species residing in the Facility, such as Sullustans." Rephrase
      • Done. --Darth tom Imperial Emblem (Imperial Intelligence) 11:55, 11 December 2008 (UTC)
        • "The inhabitants of the Mining Facility were all killed after HK-50 triggered the emergency lockdown or by the rampant mining droids." Huh? I'm pretty sure a hag, lady, and some other Force-sensitive guy escaped. The Force-sensitive guy was at least a resident. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 13:57, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
    • "The planet Peragus II is often confused with the Peragus Mining Facility. To add to the confusion, the developers of Knights of the Old Republic II labeled quests received in the facility with "Peragus II"." I'm sorry, what? there is no context for this confusion and how can they be confused if it is the only thing within hundreds of miles. I'm feeling very confused about this confusion.
    • "The sole point of interest on Peragus II was the Peragus Mining Facility" This is untrue according to the infobox which states one can look at the wonderous beauty of the asteroid field.
      • Done. --Darth tom Imperial Emblem (Imperial Intelligence) 11:55, 11 December 2008 (UTC)
        • In the Location section, there is no main article stub for the asteroid field. And what drift charts? Provide context. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 13:57, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
          • By 'stub' do you mean sub header? --Darth tom Imperial Emblem (Imperial Intelligence) 11:55, 11 December 2008 (UTC)
            • I meant that "Main Article: Peragus Asteroid Field" Should be there before you start talking about it. But good idea. Both sections need subheaders. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 06:50, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
    • I'm not getting why, if the point of the article is to be about the planet that the Skirmish is so widely mentioned, it makes it appear that that occured on the planet when it occured on an asteroid in the asteroid field. It doesn't really have to do with it, other than it blew up the planet which should obviously be mentioned.
      • I'm sorry? Please elaborate. --Darth tom Imperial Emblem (Imperial Intelligence) 11:55, 11 December 2008 (UTC)
        • The skirmish is a very large part of the article. The way it is written makes it seem like it is on planet, when it is not. It was in the asteroid field. It needs to be trimmed down a bit. Should be mentioned, just not be half the article. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 13:27, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
    • The Jedi Exile is not linked to in the body.
    • The Bts is also not sourced at all.
      • Fixed. --Darth tom Imperial Emblem (Imperial Intelligence) 11:55, 11 December 2008 (UTC)
        • Not fixed. You must source the confusion. You sourced the name of the missions not that people got the station and asteroid confused. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 13:57, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
    • "In approximately 4,000 BBY" Got a source for that? NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 13:57, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
    • Removed. --Darth tom Imperial Emblem (Imperial Intelligence) 21:39, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
    • "oil was found on the planet," No it wasn't it was referred to as feul. It was not specified as oil. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 13:57, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
    • When is Pearagus specified as being in the Kwymar sector in KotOR2? NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 07:00, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
    • Confucious say, "Have nice day" NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 14:47, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments

  • I was wondering where in Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic II: The Sith Lords you found Peragus II as being located in the Kwymar sector. I don't recall it being mentioned in which sector it was found. It would be great if you could clear that up for me. Thanks. Cylka-talk- 05:00, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
  • I think Peragus was said to be in the same sector as Telos somewhere in KOTOR, and Telos is in the Kwymar sector, as stated by The Hunt Within: Valance's Tale. So it's a straightforward deduction. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 12:16, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
    • I would be inclined to agree with you Soresu, except I can't find anything in the dialog files that shows the two were in the same sector. While it makes sense that they were, I haven't seen it be definitely proven. That is really what I was hesistating about. Cylka-talk- 01:15, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Remove nom (AgriCorps vote only)

  1. ACvote I truly feel this is going nowhere. Graestan(Talk) 00:43, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Unfortunately. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 01:03, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 21:09, 22 January 2009 (UTC)