Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Pelikki/Legends

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Pelikki

  • Nominated by: LelalMekha (talk) 19:35, February 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: This one's for the Barn Burner.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. 501st dogma(talk) 01:08, February 14, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Note that I added the Databank to the sourcelist, given the image and the misidentification. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 17:15, February 14, 2014 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 19:59, March 6, 2014 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Good job. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:21, March 7, 2014 (UTC)
  5. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 03:14, March 8, 2014 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • Mention of sentience should go in the behavior, not the bio section.
  • Also, mention of what it preyed upon should go in the behavior section as well, not the bio one.
  • Direct mention of it being a piscavore would be nice in the body.
  • Otherwise, good work. 501st dogma(talk) 23:22, February 12, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • I'm unsure of your use of "Nabooian" throughout the article. Can that term actually be used in conjunction with the people of Naboo? Our Naboo (people) article says this: "While the demonym 'Naboo' was used to describe those Humans, the term 'nabooian' was sometimes assigned to animal species, like the nabooian waterfowl." That sentence is sourced to The Wildlife of Star Wars. Please also check for proper capitalization use.
    • I think this statement from Wildlife needs to be altered somehow. The same book mentions the "Nabooian Royal Guards," and Star Wars Galaxies had a news service called "The Nabooian Citizen." I take it that the use of "Nabooian" to designate people is safe. --Lelal Mekha Old Republic military symbol (Audience Room) 12:58, March 7, 2014 (UTC)
  • Is this your analysis, that they looked awkward on land? Because I'm afraid that's tending too far into the realm of speculation if so: "two legs ending in large feet that looked awkward on land"
    • Nope, this comes from The Phantom Menace: The Expanded Visual Dictionary. The exact quote is "Broad feet are awkward on land." --Lelal Mekha Old Republic military symbol (Audience Room) 12:58, March 7, 2014 (UTC)
      • In that case, I think you should try and reword this sentence to avoid saying "looked awkward" and just say that they are awkward. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:55, March 7, 2014 (UTC)
        • It now says " large feet the appearance of which was awkward on land." --Lelal Mekha Old Republic military symbol (Audience Room) 17:06, March 7, 2014 (UTC)
          • I think you're missing what I'm getting at. I'm looking to avoid use of the word "appear" altogether, because the source doesn't say they "appeared" awkward; it says they "are" awkward. There's a bit of a difference in meaning there. I think it should be "two legs ending in large feet the were awkward on land." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:13, March 7, 2014 (UTC)
            • You'll have to excuse me for that, it seems I've missed a nuance, something that was lost in translation. Mesa funny foreigner. Fixed for good. --Lelal Mekha Old Republic military symbol (Audience Room) 17:17, March 7, 2014 (UTC)
  • Two problems with these two sentences. Firstly, The Phantom Menace cannot be used as a source for the 32 BBY date. I would suggest sourcing that to the New Essential Chronology. Secondly, Obi-Wan is not a Jedi Knight by this point. Simply saying two "Jedi" would suffice instead: "Around the time of the Invasion of Naboo in 32 BBY, a group of pelikki had made their home in an estuary of the Solleu River located near the Theed Royal Palace. When a submersible tribubble bongo transporting the Jedi Knights Qui-Gon Jinn and Obi-Wan Kenobi bobbed to the surface, those pelikki were surprised and flew away in fright."
  • If this subject appears in Complete Locations, then it's probably in Inside the Worlds of Star Wars Episode I as well, which will then need to be added to the Sources list.
  • Unless the SW.com Blog contains unique canon information, which it does not appear to do so, it belongs in an External links section, per the Layout Guide.
  • I think you should probably check the Episode I video game to see if these things appear. I haven't played that game in over 10 years, but IIRC, there's a cutscene where Obi-Wan's bongo pops out of the water, and some birds go flying off. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:21, March 7, 2014 (UTC)
    • As far as the PC version is concerned, there is no such scene. After the "always a bigger fish sequence," you just see the bongo entering an underwater tunnel, then the image fades to black, and then you see the bongo already emerged. I can't speak for the PS1 version, though. --Lelal Mekha Old Republic military symbol (Audience Room) 12:58, March 7, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

  • I won't undo my support, but I think you could add to the Bio section that it had eyes, a tail, and some sort of crest(?) on the head. 501st dogma(talk) 12:46, February 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Support kept, but just want to remind you to actually include those Databank entries in the sources. I assume those two are the only relevant ones. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 16:33, February 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:14, March 8, 2014 (UTC)