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Peet Deretalia
- Nominated by: Cwedin(talk) 03:28, February 14, 2018 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: "Will you BB my Valentine?"
(4 ACs/3 Users/7 Total)
Support
- Can't find anything wrong. Nice!—Tommy-Macaroni
(TAKE A SEAT) 12:43, February 16, 2018 (UTC) - Nice work. grunny@wookieepedia:~$ 05:38, February 22, 2018 (UTC)
Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:42, March 2, 2018 (UTC)- <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 02:07, March 11, 2018 (UTC)
- Daaaawwww! MasterFred
(Whatever) 08:22, March 14, 2018 (UTC) - Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:01, March 20, 2018 (UTC)
- 1358 (Talk) 21:11, March 20, 2018 (UTC)
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Ayrehead
In the intro you say the pair fell in love after they were introduced by BB-8, but in the body you say they already had feelings for each other before hand.Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:24, February 23, 2018 (UTC)- Fixed.
Please sub-section the bio section. It'll probably let you fit in another image.Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:24, February 23, 2018 (UTC)- Done.
In the P&T section every sentence starts with Deretalia, could you change up the wording a bit?Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:24, February 23, 2018 (UTC)- Done.
This is pretty nitpicky, but I'd say her shirt is green since it's clearly meant to be the same uniform as Goss Toowers.Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:24, February 23, 2018 (UTC)- Good catch, I completely missed that connection.
I don't think you need to include the sentence about oil baths in the equipment section. That isn't really her equipment.Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:24, February 23, 2018 (UTC)- Should the quote be removed also? - Cwedin(talk) 02:55, February 24, 2018 (UTC)
- Hmm, on reconsideration if you worded it as "she had access to oil baths in the Resistance base" or something similar you could probably include it and then keep the quote. Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:22, March 1, 2018 (UTC)
- Should the quote be removed also? - Cwedin(talk) 02:55, February 24, 2018 (UTC)
AV
Ecks Dee
"Meltsa accepted, and before the two left, Deretalia went to BB-8, thanking the droid with a kiss. Hand-in-hand, Deretalia and Meltsa left." These two sentences read kinda awkward, probably due to the two "left". See if you can reword it.1358 (Talk) 22:22, March 13, 2018 (UTC)
Toprawa
The images are just a little too big for the sections. Firstly, I'd suggest reducing them to 200px, which helps the Bio images fit within those two subections. As for the P/T image, it just doesn't fit there. It never looks good shoehorning an image into a small section wherein the next section header (in this case Skills and abilities) is forcibly intended as a result. Right-aligning it at 200px is an option, but then it really just looks too crowded underneath the second Bio image. Therefore, I'd recommend just removing the P/T image.Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:33, March 15, 2018 (UTC)- Done. - Cwedin(talk) 18:03, March 19, 2018 (UTC)
- I actually moved the image down so it falls between the Skills and Equipment sections, which looks better than in the P/T, since it's not too close the second Bio image. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:20, March 19, 2018 (UTC)
- Done. - Cwedin(talk) 18:03, March 19, 2018 (UTC)
I left a redlink for the Canon version of oil, which you should fill in.- Just a reviewing note, I removed the On the Front Lines reference to the X-wing model. Several of us in the Inq/AC had a long discussion about how best to use these third-party special refs to source ship models, etc., and we basically came to the decision that they're not strictly necessary in 99% of cases, so you're going to see us start to remove them as time goes on. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:20, March 19, 2018 (UTC)
- Out of curiosity, what would the 1% be? - Cwedin(talk) 04:43, March 20, 2018 (UTC)
- Basically just cases where something needs a special reference note in the instance something is not straightforwardly clear or perhaps even controversial. I think a good example is sourcing whether a Star Destroyer is an ISD-I or ISD-II, which isn't always clear, especially in comic illustrations. For example, reference 5 here. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:01, March 20, 2018 (UTC)
- Out of curiosity, what would the 1% be? - Cwedin(talk) 04:43, March 20, 2018 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:11, March 20, 2018 (UTC)