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Pathogenic bomb
- Nominated by: Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 18:23, August 19, 2010 (UTC) - Nomination comments: Former CAN nomination upgraded to GAN because I was lazy during the initial writing process.
(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)
Support
Clean. Grand Moff Tranner 
(Comlink) 19:59, August 21, 2010 (UTC)- -- 1358 (Talk) 13:27, August 23, 2010 (UTC)
CC7567 (talk) 20:54, August 23, 2010 (UTC)- Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:25, August 25, 2010 (UTC)
- Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 01:18, August 27, 2010 (UTC)
Object
Pathetic bomb
"...Moff Kentor Sarne intended to deploy pathogenic bombs against the citizens/population of the planet Kolatill in the Kathol sector of the Outer Rim Territories." Two almost identical sentence. Please reword.- Reworded intro instance.
Could you say that Sarne is an Imperial as well?- Mentioned.
"the assault was in retribution for the populace's defiance against Sarne; the locals had overthrown their Imperial governor and declared their allegiance to the New Republic when they learned that Sarne had lost control of his capital, Kal'Shebbol." When I first read that, I thought that Sarne was the governor. Could you slightly reword to avoid confusion?- Clarified.
"...one pilot registered the presence of the pathogenic bombs aboard the bombers when one of the fighters was destroyed, and the pilot's sensors registered the presence...'" Two times 'registered the presence'. Please reword.- Reworded second instance.
Link for the battle in the body?- -- 1358 (Talk) 20:29, August 21, 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 10:59, August 23, 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. - Cavalier One
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:18, August 27, 2010 (UTC)