Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Ozurist

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Ozurist

  • Nominated by: —Cade Calrayn 01:03, March 27, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I think it's one of my better articles, so I'm trying for my first GA.

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Good work on your first GAN. 501st DogmaRepublic emblem(Comlink) 19:57, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Good job, Cade! Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 04:01, April 11, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Coruscantfan (Talk) 20:48, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:00, April 24, 2012 (UTC)
  5. Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:33, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
  6. ACvote—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 00:19, May 4, 2012 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Menkooroo 20:00, May 9, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  • Intro should be expanded.
    • Done.
  • Biography does not mention sex or species.
    • Done.
  • Context needed for several things; The Works, the Sacking of Coruscant, etc.
    • Done.
  • Articles needed for these "mobiles" since they appear to be a significant and unique threat, and "Thermodraft".
    • Done.
  • Article appears to be underlinked. Review the article and link in appropriate places remembering that an article should be linked once in the infobox, once in the intro, and once in the main body.
    • Done.
      • Take a look at this edit and see where you could have linked more articles. You'll be surprised what we have articles on around here. I'm still surprised and I've been here years. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:25, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
        • Done.
  • Needs a P&T section.
    • Done.
  • Handle these basic objections and then I'll re-review the article. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 08:18, March 27, 2012 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • And now for the rest:
  • A chief engineer who worked in The Works - worked in The Works is a little repetitive. Can we use something else instead of "worked"?
    • Employed—done.
  • Context needed for the Cthons.
    • Done.
  • Regarding the choices available to the player in this scenario: look at Denal-zon for instance. The article (current GAN) indicates that the choices made by the player assume that light side players choose the most light side path available, and this is clearly marked by the {{GameLSmechanics}} template bracketing the resolution of the quest. Presumably, the outcome described is the most light-sided avenue available, and should use these templates to indicate as much. In addition, alternate paths, such as any other available resolutions that may garner dark side points, should be presented in the BTS. Also, mention should be made of whether or not the mission is available only to certain classes of player.
    • I've checked all of the online walkthroughs, and that quest has no light/dark options at all. I'm surprised - I haven't seen many of those.
  • The first paragraph of the PT - can this be sourced directly to TOR? For example, does the game explicitly state that the Lethan Twi'lek's are rare? If not, then you need to source this statement to something else.
    • Hmmm.... The game does not, and the Lethan article also has no source for the rarity. I'll remove it for now—it's not really necessary, and none of the articles for other Lethan Twi'leks mention the rarity.
  • Ozurist was believed by many to be slightly insane, - who believed this?
    • Changed it to "could be seen"... considered was used twice, and no one else talks to/about him.
      • So the notion that he is slightly insane is basically only seen from the point of view of the Republic hero? If so, then you need specify that it was the hero who thought him slightly loopy. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:09, April 12, 2012 (UTC)
  • A note; we do not use double spacing between sentences. I had to get used to this as well, and I've removed them from the article. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:25, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
    • Fixed the last three in the article. —Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 13:31, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
Lee's charge
  • Preliminary objection: There is infobox-exclusive information.
    • Done.
      • Please also mention his skin color and that he had no hair. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:48, March 27, 2012 (UTC)
        • Done.
  • That he is a Lethan Twi'lek is intro-exclusive.
    • Done.
  • I'll continue after you dealt with these and Cav's objections. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:19, March 27, 2012 (UTC)
    • Could you explain the context objection? —Cade Calrayn 16:35, March 27, 2012 (UTC)
      • Sorry to cut in, but FWIW, when someone asks for context, they want you to explain the item more clearly. For example, context for "Echo Base" would be something like "Luke Skywalker went into Echo Base, a secret base on Hoth." Another example would be context for "Hoth," which would be "planet Hoth." Make sense?—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 16:43, March 27, 2012 (UTC)
        • Exactly. An appropiate context for Obi-Wan Kenobi would be Jedi Master for example. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:48, March 27, 2012 (UTC)
          • Thanks for the explanation. I'll get right on it. —Cade Calrayn 16:53, March 27, 2012 (UTC)
            • Done.
  • Please take a look on your linking. You only have to link things one time in the intro and one time in the body (Bio, P&T, BtS). Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:35, March 28, 2012 (UTC)
    • Done, I think.
  • Ozurist asked a traveling hero: Please find a correct link for this person. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:40, March 29, 2012 (UTC)
    • Lee, according to Trayus' comments below, the "individual" should not be linked until the behind the scenes section, as it is an out-of-universe article. —Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 13:58, March 29, 2012 (UTC)
Trayus
  • Great to see you nominating! A few things I noticed:
  • Does the game specify for whom he was a chief engineer? Any specific agency?
    • Nope. I checked.
  • In the intro, you should clarify what a "mobile" is.
    • Done.
  • Can you clarify exactly what kind of machine Thermodraft is/what it does?
    • He didn't really say - the only info is that his "death" will release radiation and cause an explosion, and that you release pressure from his exoskeleton.
  • As we discussed, since this is a Republic-only mission, can you use the more specific term "Republic combatant" or "Republic-allied individual" in place of "travelling hero" in both the intro and the body?
    • Sure.
  • Also, you never want to link to out-of-universe articles in in-universe sections of articles, so we should remove the link to the TOR article. You can however clarify in the BTS that "Meltdown!" can be completed by any PC of the Republic faction, and link to the TOR character section from there if you like. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 18:54, March 28, 2012 (UTC)
    • Okay, I removed the link.... I already mentioned that Ozurist gives Republic characters the mission. —Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 13:58, March 29, 2012 (UTC)
  • Looks good. You should probably add links to the character class articles in the BTS: Jedi Consular, Jedi Knight, trooper, and smuggler.
    • Done.
  • Also, if the mission is optional (not a class main story requirement) make sure to add {{Gamemechanics}}. If there's a light/dark side option, be sure to add {{GameLSmechanics}} in the bio for the result and the dark-side info in the BTS. Either way, make sure that you make a note in the BTS that the mission is not a requirement. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 04:18, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
    • It's one of those weird ones without alignment choices... I added an explanation in the BTS. —Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 13:36, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
501st
  • Context for Coruscant in bio. (first sentence)
    • Done.
  • Good work. 501st DogmaRepublic emblem(Comlink) 20:05, April 3, 2012 (UTC)
Coruscantfan
  • If you could add 3641 BBY somewhere to give a specific date to the events.
    • Done.
  • The colors yellow and red need to be linked to in the info box and the P&t section.
  • That's all for now, I'll check again later. Coruscantfan (Talk) 03:23, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
Hey there
  • Since the player character can have a conversation with him, there have gotta be quotes for the Bio and P&t.
    • Done.
  • I'm a little uneasy with the statement "Ozurist had twin head-tails, also known as lekku, in place of hair." "In place of hair" is a pretty Humanocentric view. I suggest rewording, or even just jettisoning the statement altogether, as noting generic species traits isn't necessary in articles about individuals of that species. Like, an article on a Rodian character wouldn't need to say "He had a snout." Menkooroo 02:46, May 9, 2012 (UTC)
    • Done. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 19:05, May 9, 2012 (UTC)
      • Coolness. I changed the double-hyphens to mdashes; check out our dash policy. Congrats on your first GA! Menkooroo 20:00, May 9, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:32, May 10, 2012 (UTC)