Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Osss-10

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The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Osss-10

  • Nominated by: Jinzler (talk) 21:23, February 19, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A bounty hunter

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. grunny@wookieepedia:~$ 05:46, March 6, 2018 (UTC)
  2. —Tommy-Macaroni Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 18:29, March 7, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Grunny
  • The first sentence of the second paragraph in the Biography section is quite long/information heavy. Might be worth splitting up into two, probably after "and preferably killed." What do you think?
  • In the fourth paragraph of the Biography section, the two uses of "however" in quick succession is quite jarring to read. What do you think of changing the wording of one of them?
  • In the quote in the Personality and traits section: "what you're going to do-but he can't predict." Should that hyphen be an em dash or a comma? The same for the quote in the Equipment section, the hyphen should probably be an em dash. grunny@wookieepedia:~$ 11:30, February 22, 2018 (UTC)
    • Fixed - it should be em dash. Jinzler (talk) 23:12, March 5, 2018 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • I'd like to see some subsectioning in the Bio. Four paragraphs typically look good evenly divided into two subsections. You could add another quote if available, too. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:06, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
  • This is particularly repetitive. Please rephrase: "Osss-10 equipped himself with specialized equipment..."
  • And here. "Osss-10 equipped himself with state-of-the-art equipment..." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:54, April 4, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Idle objections past the new 10-day limit. 24-hour grace period from meeting has expired; talk page message was sent to nominator with no response. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:38, April 16, 2018 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Additionally, user has more or less disappeared from the website, it seems. 1358 (Talk) 00:39, April 16, 2018 (UTC)
  3. ACvote MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 00:44, April 16, 2018 (UTC)