Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Oksan

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Oksan

• Nominated by: —spookywilloww^talk 18:55, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:30, January 6, 2020 (UTC)
2. Assuming Zed's objection is cleared up. Tommy Macaroni 20:40, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
3. Zed42 (talk) 21:02, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
4. Imperators II^(Talk) 21:36, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
5. Objection handled via IRC. MasterFred^(Whatever) 22:25, January 10, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Toprawa

• I'm a bit unclear on some of the details in the article. Why exactly is Tolla threatening to destroy her own bombs? Because her sabotage plan had failed? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:40, January 3, 2020 (UTC)
  • Tweaked. Perhaps that clarifies?—spookywilloww^talk 20:15, January 3, 2020 (UTC)
    • Yes, better. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:35, January 5, 2020 (UTC)
• The article doesn't explain the significance of this detail. Why is important that Delta Jeet is bringing Izal Garsea to them? All we know from reading the article is that Garsea was apparently intentionally left behind on Actlyon (the article isn't crystal clear about what's going on there either, for that matter). Why is Garsea being delivered back to them, and why are they concerned about this? "...though the Zygerrian and his colleague Damar Olin felt concerned that the pilot Delta Jeet had not brought Garsea to them as planned." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:35, January 5, 2020 (UTC)
  • Does that work?—spookywilloww^talk 02:16, January 5, 2020 (UTC)
    • Much better. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:57, January 6, 2020 (UTC)
• I'm similarly confused by this. Oksan falls to the ground, and suddenly he's exchanging blaster fire with someone. There's no explanatory transition here between these two sentences. Why/how does this Creature Stall worker come into play? "...Oksan until he fell three meters to the ground. The Zygerrian traded blaster fire with Creature Stall worker Volt Vescuso..." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:57, January 6, 2020 (UTC)
  • Tweaked, should explain.—spookywilloww^talk 20:35, January 6, 2020 (UTC)

Zed

• You should probably add a brief mention that Garsea was also on Batuu for unrelated reasons, otherwise it seems like they went all the way back to Actlyon to retrieve her. Zed42 (talk) 20:27, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
  • Shuffled a few phrases around in the process, but the context should be there.—spookywilloww^talk 20:55, January 10, 2020 (UTC)

Imp

• Can we get an image for Bio? There looks to be enough space for one. Imperators II^(Talk) 21:06, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
  • Added.—spookywilloww^talk 21:16, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
• Is the reason why Ana Tolla wanted to destroy Kat Saka's farm provided in the novel? Imperators II^(Talk) 21:06, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
  • Tolla never mentioned; all that's known is that it was their objective.—spookywilloww^talk 21:16, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
• "proprietor Oga Garra" — since the action described in the paragraph seems to take place in the farm, it's not quite apparent what is Garra the proprietor of. Imperators II^(Talk) 21:06, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
  • This should work; only did so in the body, but can also put it in the intro if need be.—spookywilloww^talk 21:16, January 10, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:25, January 10, 2020 (UTC)