Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Obex/Legends

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Obex

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:18, April 21, 2011 (UTC)
  2. JangFett (Talk) 01:26, April 26, 2011 (UTC)
  3. ACvote—Tommy 9281 Sunday, May 8, 2011, 04:11 UTC
  4. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 10:15, May 14, 2011 (UTC)
  5. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:46, May 16, 2011 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 00:49, May 18, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Lee attacks
  • Could you vary your use of "Rex and Cody" in the intro a little bit to make the text flow better?
    • How's that?
  • Otherwise very nice. Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:40, April 20, 2011 (UTC)
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  • I don't know where my S1 guide went, but I'm sure CC or someone that has it could check to see if the Obex is mentioned/pictured. I don't have UK magazines 6.2-6.4 (I only have the magazines' comics) at the moment, but the others, including the kiddy TCW magazines 1-2, have been checked.
    • I'll ask CC about this source info. Thanks for the recommendation.
      • Okay, no problem. :)
  • In Rookies, Rex was the one who piloted the Obex to the Rishi Station, which is in the article, but there are some minor issues. In the intro, you mention that both Cody and Rex are flying the shuttle to the listening posts. In some instances, in both the intro and history sections, you say the shuttle itself flew the clones. Which is correct? The TCW Visual Guide indicates that the Obex is Rex's ship, so you could mention this.
    • Added and corrected the info, how does it look?
  • I don't remember Cody and Rex rushing back to the Obex after they were ambushed by the commando droids. IIRC, they took cover behind some crates, and the commando droids tossed several thermal detonators at the Obex which destroyed it.
    • After looking over the Episode Guide, I believe you are correct. Changed.
  • "The shuttle first flew Rex and Cody to a tracking station on the planet Pastil, leaving the Obex on the station's landing pad." This goes back to my objection above. So the shuttle flew the two clones to the tracking station and left itself on the station's landing pad?
    • Don't you understand it's a magic shuttle? :P Changed
  • "...so that the Republic would be unaware of the Confederacy's planned assault on the Republic's nearby cloning facility at Kamino" Personally, I don't think this should be mentioned, but if you want to give the invasion some context, you could shorten this. You could say they invaded the Rishi Station as part of the Confederacy's plan to attack the nearby Kamino, or something along those lines.
    • Deleted the info
  • "Rex and Cody, knowing that they had to escape, tried to run back to the Obex, but the commando droids threw several thermal detonators under the shuttle, completely destroying the Obex before the clone officers could reach their vessel" Like in the intro, I don't remember this happening. Cody and Rex hide behind crates and fired at the commando droids, before the droids threw thermal detonators at the Obex.
    • Changed
  • Where in the Rookies episode guide does it say Cody is the highest ranking officer, therefore he is in-command of the Obex. I see the commander outranking the Captain fact, but I see no connection to the Obex.
    • Fixed
  • I took care of several linking and grammatical issues during my copy-edit. You also linked the TCW episode Rookies in the history at one point. :P Also, be careful of the "In 21 BBY." In both the intro and history, you said "In," as opposed to around/circa. We don't know when the Rishi moon battle took place, so it's safe to say around for now. Overall, nice job, Kilson. :)JangFett (Talk) 05:11, April 25, 2011 (UTC)
QGJ
  • As the intro acts independently from the main body, you need to establish that Cody and Rex were nicknames there as well.
    • Added
  • In "History," could you establish that the first time they were greeted by a disguised droid was over the comlink/hologram/whatever. When reading this and the following sentence, I was initially left under the impression that you described the meeting with the disguised droid on the landing pad twice.
    • Fixed
  • Nitpicky, I know, but your usage of "completely destroyed" makes it sound as though no trace of the Obex was left, while I'm sure there were some debris. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 19:44, May 10, 2011 (UTC)
Moffship
  • I don't have time for a full review at the moment, but I do have a question - is the shuttle from Mouse Hunt confirmed to be the Obex? The reason I ask is that the Mouse Hunt shuttle, with its central wing, looks more like a Lambda shuttle. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 18:36, May 15, 2011 (UTC)
    • Although it doesn't say in the comic that the ship was the Obex, we do know that the clone officers went directly from Pastil to Rishi, and that the clones used the Obex as a transport throughout their inspection tour, so I believe it is safe to assume that it is the Obex in the comic. Do you think it would be appropriate to insert a ref note to that effect? Kilson(Let's have a chat) 01:48, May 16, 2011 (UTC)
  • "Back at the station, the disguised droid again tried to convince the officers to leave, but, seeing the warning flare shot in the night sky, Rex, convinced that something was amiss, shot the droid in the head, taking of its helmet to reveal the deception." - Way too many clauses here. Please split this sentence up somehow. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 22:54, May 17, 2011 (UTC)
  • This should be all: Upon the first mention of the disguised commando droid, I linked to Unit 26. However, you mention that Rex and Cody later encountered a disguised commando droid after landing the shuttle. Are these two droids the same? If so, please reword these mentions to clarify. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 00:41, May 18, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:49, May 18, 2011 (UTC)