Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Nooroyo

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Nooroyo

  • Nominated by: —spookywillowwtalk 18:31, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: This kinda sat on that weird boundary of whether to write it as a FAN or a GAN so it's kinda sitting in that void zone.
  • Date Archived: 16:46, 30 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 922 words (176 introduction, 732 body, 14 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 907 words (174 introduction, 719 body, 14 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:ASTWP:NOVELSWP:CIS

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Support

  1. Wok142 (talk) 19:21, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Lewisr (talk) 05:10, 30 April 2024 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Imperators II(Talk) 07:20, 30 April 2024 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:41, 30 April 2024 (UTC)
  5. Booply (talk) 16:43, 30 April 2024 (UTC)

Object

Wok
  • In the last sentence of the intro paragraph, change the end to just be "visited the planet for spice trade negotiations" so the word spice doesn't show up twice in a row. Wok142 (talk) 19:04, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Second sentence of Description, change to "The world's temperate climate fostered the growth of lush green jungles and biodiverse plant life." Otherwise the word growth shows up three times in the same sentence. Wok142 (talk) 19:04, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
  • In Outbreak of war, you could change paramour into "secret paramour." Wok142 (talk) 19:04, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Last sentence in that first paragraph of Outbreak of war, the "however" seems like it could just be removed. This might just be personal preference so feel free to reject this suggestion. Wok142 (talk) 19:04, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Also in Outbreak of war, you could remove "then" from the sentence "As the pair flew away, the landing control then sent a scanning team to investigate their vessel." Wok142 (talk) 19:04, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
  • In this same section, think you should make a note of how Gunray's presence meant Amidala was in danger, like you did in the intro. Wok142 (talk) 19:04, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
    • Tweaked the above; though many you're welcome to copy-edit in the future as you see fit, since they mostly fall under sofixit.—spookywillowwtalk 19:14, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
      • Cool, I will try to be more proactive about these minor things. Wok142 (talk) 19:20, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
  • For the image of Anakin and Padme, are there any other image options that are more portrait-like and less showing of action (like the images of just Padme and Jamilla)? I think the fact that verb "traveled" is in the image caption makes it seem like this image could be of them traveling to Nooroyo, which is not the case. A different image might be less misleading, although maybe just changing the caption would help clear it up too. Wok142 (talk) 19:04, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
    • I disagree with this one; it's not relevant to the planet itself and thus not noted, but she's wearing the same outfit as she does on Geonosis in this scene. Given Skywalker's in the same garb as well (Jedi always kinda wear the same time), it's the most accurately illustrative of what they would have looked like on Nooroyo.—spookywillowwtalk 19:14, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
      • Makes sense to me. All good then. Wok142 (talk) 19:20, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
Imp
  • Gonna need some context for the connection between Amidala and the Trade Federation, i.e., why Gunray's presence on Nooroyo posed a danger to her. Imperators II(Talk) 10:18, 28 April 2024 (UTC)

Comments

  • Weird if we don't have any more neutral Canon promo shots of Geonosis Padmé and Anakin... Imperators II(Talk) 10:18, 28 April 2024 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 16:46, 30 April 2024 (UTC)