Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Nikto mercenary encampment

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Nikto hideout

  • Nominated by: UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:55, March 1, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: This should be safe one to do.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. RattsT (talk) 21:41, March 28, 2020 (UTC)
  2. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 08:18, April 12, 2020 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Objections handled via IRC. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:58, April 12, 2020 (UTC)
  4. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 09:38, April 13, 2020 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Objections addressed via IRC. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 16:40, April 13, 2020 (UTC)

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Ratts
  • Arvala-7 isn't mentioned in the body.
  • "... before making their way to the building where the Child was kept and hiding behind its pillars." Makes it sound like the Child was the one doing the hiding.
  • A small description of the landscape surrounding the compound would be nice. Kuiil also mentions that the way to the compound is impossible without a blurrg, but given that Mando makes his way out without one that might not be necessary. RattsT (talk) 03:17, March 17, 2020 (UTC)
    • Addressed all points. The part about the blurrgs can go into Arvala-7's page. UberSoldat93 (talk) 04:46, March 17, 2020 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • "A compound was located on the desert world Arvala-7, where a company of Nikto mercenaries was based." Do you mean to say that the company is based on the planet or in the compound?
    • Two problems here: Single-clause sentences, such as the first intro sentences, generally read very poorly. Additionally, the second intro sentence reads almost identically to the last Description sentence. 1358 (Talk) 11:40, April 11, 2020 (UTC)
      • Tried something else now. Does this fit better? UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 12:07, April 11, 2020 (UTC)
        • Did some minor tweaking. 1358 (Talk) 14:27, April 11, 2020 (UTC)
  • "and was made up of numerous buildings with a number" From the image, the amount of buildings is clearly finite and not numerous.
  • "and a well populating the inner area." What inner area? You need to clarify that the buildings are laid out in a way that creates sort of an inner yard.
  • "During the New Republic Era, the compound was under the control of a group of Nikto mercenaries.[1]" Do we know that the compound was controlled by the mercenaries during the entire New Republic era, which apparently lasts almost 30 years? I don't think the episode makes any such claim.
  • "The assassin droid bounty hunter IG-11 entered the compound and compelled them to obey" The word "compel" implies that he succeeded in coercing them.
    • Addressed all of the above points. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 09:26, April 11, 2020 (UTC)
  • "taking the droid's flotsam back to his farm in order to rebuild him." Does the source really use "flotsam"? I personally had to google the word and it seems it's mainly used for describing ship and water-related debris. Using a more ubiquitous term would be beneficial. 1358 (Talk) 08:40, April 11, 2020 (UTC)
  • I think you can describe the buildings in the compound a bit more thoroughly. Flat roof and color scheme, for one. 1358 (Talk) 14:27, April 11, 2020 (UTC)
    • Done. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 15:33, April 11, 2020 (UTC)
      • I think you can do even better; explain how the buildings are laid out and I think the main building where the Child is held is shown enough in the show to receive a more elaborate description. 1358 (Talk) 18:32, April 11, 2020 (UTC)
Ben

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 16:40, April 13, 2020 (UTC)