Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Mission to Bogg 11

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Mission to Bogg 11

• Nominated by: 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 12:30, March 25, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:Saw a one sentence discription of this article and decided to change that.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:32, March 28, 2012 (UTC)
2. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:02, April 27, 2012 (UTC)
3. Menkooroo 22:02, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
4. Didn't see anything wrong. Good job! Cade Calrayn 23:02, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
5. —Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 01:58, May 17, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge

• Can we really say it is a Clone Wars conflict? IMHO this is a seperate action that has nothing to do with the war. So it would be best to leave that field bare or at least add something like "independent conflict".
  • Changed
    • Take a look at my change. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:49, March 25, 2012 (UTC)
      • Thanks for fixing that. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 21:13, March 26, 2012 (UTC)
• If there were no casualties for Fett and Aia, please place "None" in the casualties section. You can leave the field bare completely, because the Slave I is no real casualty. You can write in the "Outcome" section that Fett took it back from Gjon.
  • Fixed
    • It's better to write "none" in both fields. If we leave them bare it seems like we don't know if there were any casualties. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:51, March 25, 2012 (UTC)
• Please mention 22 BBY in the intro. You can replace the Battle of Geonosis with the date.
  • Changed
• Kinda nitpicky: Context for Bogg 4 and Bogg 11.
  • Contexted, if that's a word...
• Also please write "Fett" instead of "Boba". That is more encyclopedic.
  • Done
• and went into town to search for Tyranus: Link for that town?
  • I'll make the article soon as it is a red link
• showed him the moon where Gjon had taken Slave I, visible to the naked eye from where they were: Not really an objection more a question. Is "naked eye" a term?
  • Taken out
• Checked any mention of the event in Fetts, Aias and Gjons CSWE entries?
  • I don't have the CSWE, but I can assume it will be mentioned in either Gjon's or Aia's because its the only thing they were involved with. If you have the CSWE, could you look at Aia's or Gjon's to confirm the source. Thanks, 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 17:18, March 25, 2012 (UTC)
    • We have a page to get these info. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:51, March 25, 2012 (UTC)
      • Ok, I'll post the question there. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 21:13, March 26, 2012 (UTC)
        • Apparently its mentioned in both Aia's and Gjon's enteries. I've put that in the article. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 20:10, March 27, 2012 (UTC)
• The mission to Bogg 11 first appeared in the 2002's Boba Fett: The Fight to Survive, written by Terry Bisson and released on April 23. : Something missing here.
  • Sorry, what's missing?
    • Sorry, I though the year was missing. Please check if my change is fine. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:51, March 25, 2012 (UTC)
      • That's OK
• No quotes for the body?
  • Added
    • One for the prelude? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:53, March 25, 2012 (UTC)
      • Added
• Good work. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 16:10, March 25, 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 17:18, March 25, 2012 (UTC)
• Please find some synonyms for Fett throughout the article, e.g. young bounty hunter. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:53, March 25, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 21:13, March 26, 2012 (UTC)

Floyd

• Intro: "Regain control" of Slave I sounds awkward, kind of like the Slave I is running wild without him. Something like "regain possession" would be better.
  • Done. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 20:17, April 26, 2012 (UTC)
• About the [sic] quotes, I think it would be OK if you just fixed the typo yourself, since we know what word is being written, and it looks less sloppy.
  • Done. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 20:17, April 26, 2012 (UTC)
• First sentence of Prelude rambles on too long and should be split up.
  • Better? 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 20:17, April 26, 2012 (UTC)
• Aftermath quote is missing punctuation.
  • Fixed. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 20:17, April 26, 2012 (UTC)
• Good work. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 01:30, April 26, 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review. 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 20:17, April 26, 2012 (UTC)

Don't get Bogged down

• Reload your infobox.
  • Reloaded an extremely out of date info box.
• Something this small is normally a {{Sofixit}}, but it's important for you to know in all future noms: (Mentioned only) should never be used in a "Sources" section, as "Sources" are by definition only mentions.
  • Done.
• Since the descriptor "starship" is used a few times in both the intro and body, there's the opportunity for some more pipelinks, namely Firespray-31-class patrol and attack craft. Always keep a keen eye out for what can be linked; as a comparable example, an article that called C-3PO a protocol droid twice could link to protocol droid once and pipelink [[3PO-series protocol droid/Legends|protocol droid]] once. Make sense?
  • Pipelinked.
• The article's well-written, but the mission itself might be the most uninteresting mission in all of SW canon. :P Menkooroo 02:45, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
  • I know, not a single blaster shot in the whole thing. And I was actualy thinking of doing Firefight on Bogden's moons as well.... :) 501st dogma^(talk) 20:53, May 10, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:58, May 17, 2012 (UTC)