Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Masanya

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The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Masanya

  • Nominated by: —GethralkinHyperwave 18:32, November 12, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Failed CAnom because of article length increase due to context changes to satisfy CAnom discussions.

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. 501st dogma(talk) 21:20, December 3, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Assuming satisfaction of Cav and Tranner's objections. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 07:45, January 22, 2013 (UTC)

Object

CC-8
Moffship
  • Intro should be expanded. Additionally, I would suggest trimming the sentence about its involvement at Endor; perhaps you could change it to something like this: "It fought in the Battle of Endor, a decisive engagement between the Rebel Alliance and the Galactic Empire."
    • Done. —GethralkinHyperwave
      • Intro could still use an expansion. Try adding some information on its modified systems. Additionally, do not change "[[CR90 corvette/Legends|CR90 corvette]]" to "[[CR90 corvette/Legends|CR90]] [[Corvette/Legends|corvette]]." Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 16:52, December 18, 2012 (UTC)
  • Description: Rather than saying "after its acquisition by the Rebel Alliance," simply state that the Alliance modified it. Leave any details about the Alliance's acquisition of the vessel for the History section.
  • Description: "...making the ship an impossible target for missiles." - Seeing as missiles are not sentient, and therefore unable to target a vessel on their own, some clarification would be helpful here. (I know what you're getting at, but I don't want to unilaterally change it.)
  • Description: I'm not sure the mention of the other corvettes by name is necessary for this article. Furthermore, it appears that the Masanya's hull strength is only being compared to other CR90s, and not other CR models.
  • History: I don't think it's necessary to mention the Republic or its dissolution, either. Just source the necessary context for the Galactic Civil War to ROTJ and delete the rest.
    • Done. —GethralkinHyperwave
      • Perhaps I wasn't clear; I meant keep the context for the Galactic Civil War (i.e., that it was a conflict between the Rebels and the Empire). Also, you can't source the Masanya's acquisition to ROTJ. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 16:52, December 18, 2012 (UTC)
  • History: Nothing on its role in the Battle of Endor? At the very least, you need to mention that it did participate in the battle, since you only state here that it was assigned to the fleet that went to Endor.
    • Done. —GethralkinHyperwave
      • If I'm not mistaken, the image was taken directly from the film. As such, you could probably say something more about its involvement, using the corresponding scene as a source. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 16:52, December 18, 2012 (UTC)
  • BTS: Firstly, if the corvette can be seen in Episode VI, you should mention that it first appeared in the movie. This may require some reorganization to better explain how the vessel came to be named.
  • BTS: This is more of a comment, but regarding the color discrepancy, don't speculate on it. I've removed the sentence in question, but I wanted to make sure you knew why I deleted it.
  • That's all for now. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 20:36, December 17, 2012 (UTC)
    • Thank you. Let me know if I need to add/change anything else. —GethralkinHyperwave 15:44, December 18, 2012 (UTC)
      • I reverted your change to the opening sentence of the Description section, because I preferred how you originally had it. There's really no need to mention that the CR90 was a model of the CR series. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 16:52, December 18, 2012 (UTC)
Cav
  • In the infobox, it is mentioned that Alliance Fleet technicians modified the ship. However, no mention of technicians is made in the article.
  • I see no evidence of a hangar on the ship in the provided sources. The PocketModel image gives no indication, and the CCG says it has "ship-docking capability". This doesn't necessarily translate into a hangar, as external docking tubes and airlocks also qualify a ship as having ship-docking capability.
  • Masanya was first named in XWA, but there is no reference to the ship's participation in the game's events? Any unique info or assignment to a battlegroup?
  • Expansion on the Battle of Endor in the article; outcome and victor is needed to provide conclusion. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:48, January 3, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Like the nom comment above states, this is a former CAnom that failed due to size. However, before bringing it here, I satisfied all suggestions and issues raised in the CA discussion. If there are any more suggestions to help it pass GA status, please let me know so I can address them as soon as possible. Thanks. —GethralkinHyperwave 17:10, November 20, 2012 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Unaddressed objections are 3 weeks old. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:54, January 24, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 21:43, January 24, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:45, January 24, 2013 (UTC)