Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Llokay

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Llokay

• Nominated by: IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 08:19, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: A double nom with Yevra, and part of FloydProject: Path of Destruction.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. JangFett ^Talk 15:45, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
2. Mauser^Comlink 22:03, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
3. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 22:27, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
4. --Eyrezer 06:07, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
5. — Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 02:09, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. Fett
   • "Llokay, along with Sirak and Yevra waited in the library, while Githany lured Bane, who had left his lightsaber in his personal chambers, into the the archives." This sentence is confusing by the way it's set up. Too much is happening. Possibly split up the sentences to ease the clause.
     • Addressed.
   • Good work Floyd; a interesting read too :) I need to finish reading Path of Destruction JangFett ^Talk 23:44, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
     • Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 05:03, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

• A picture of Githany might add to the article, seeing as she killed him. --Eyrezer 06:07, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 09:08, 12 August 2009 (UTC)