Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Lizard-toad-snake

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Lizard-toad-snake

  • Nominated by: Cwedin(talk) 21:51, November 12, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 21:59, December 22, 2015 (UTC)
  2. Cause snakes aren't reptiles, yet. :P Imperators II(Talk) 00:52, January 9, 2016 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 22:15, January 27, 2016 (UTC)
  4. AV-6R7Crew Pit 22:35, January 27, 2016 (UTC)
  5. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 00:17, February 1, 2016 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:08, February 3, 2016 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  • I'd like to see more than one line for the intro.
    • Done.
  • All the text in parenthesis in the body should ideally be folded into the text without the need for brackets.
    • Done.
  • The siblings should be established to be on their homeworld in the first example in the history section.
    • Done.
  • Context needed for the V-171 - what is it?
    • Done.
  • Why were the siblings operating under a temporary truce? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:26, November 15, 2015 (UTC)
    • Done. Good thing they aren't siblings. :P Cwedin(talk) 20:14, November 15, 2015 (UTC)
      • Yes, well, the mention of the family's airspeeder muddled my brain. So, the truce was purely because of their feelings for one another, and not an outside dilemma? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:07, December 28, 2015 (UTC)
        • There's always an outside dilemma. I've added a bit more. Cwedin(talk) 11:16, January 1, 2016 (UTC)
          • out of habit, took to the skies once more, playing lizard-toad-snake to determine the pilot. - Some clarification needed here - did they take to the skies out of habit, or did they decide the pilot through the game out of habit? Because, as currently written, it implies the former but I think you mean the latter unless I'm mistaken. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 00:12, January 9, 2016 (UTC)
            • I think I've fixed the problem, although the sentence is still an awkward read. "Dammit, Cav! I'm a doctor, not an elocutionist!" Cwedin(talk) 06:09, January 9, 2016 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • "During the Age of the Empire, lizard-toad-snake was played by youth on Jelucan, a planet in the Outer Rim Territories of the galaxy. Six years before the Battle of Yavin,[2]" This entire sentence cannot be sourced to the Holocron keeper tweet.
    • Fixed.
  • "Years later, during the Galactic Civil War, a galaxy-wide conflict between the Alliance to Restore the Republic and the Galactic Empire, Kyrell and Ree became members of the opposing factions.[1] Three years after the Battle of Yavin,[2] the two participated in the Battle of Hoth, which resulted in an Imperial victory.[3] Soon after, Kyrell and Ree returned to their homeworld upon learning that Ree's mother, Verine, had been arrested on false allegations of embezzling funds from an Imperial mine." You go three whole sentences without mentioning the game. Please cut down on this a bit. 1358 (Talk) 23:29, January 31, 2016 (UTC)
    • Sentences are now trimmed. Cwedin(talk) 00:09, February 1, 2016 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • I would suggest utilizing the Sport infobox for this article. While it's not exactly a perfect match, it's close enough to be practical for an article like this. Or, you could go the extra yard and create an infobox for games. There certainly are enough of them to warrant one.
    • I've just added Sport for now, but I'll look into making a Game infobox this evening.
  • Reference 2 needs to do a better job of tying the information back to Lost Stars. I've rewritten the first portion of the reference note to show you what I'm looking for, but I really have no idea what the Battle of Hoth has to do with their reuniting and playing lizard-toad-snake again in Lost Stars. That's what you should clarify in the same manner as what I added. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:01, February 2, 2016 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 04:08, February 3, 2016 (UTC)