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L'cayo Llem

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Support

  1. Rebel soldiers for the win! Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 08:22, 10 June 2021 (UTC)
  2. Liverpool92Ackbar HS 14:08, 10 June 2021 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Short and sweet. Imperators II(Talk) 20:23, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
  4. ACvote OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 21:25, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
  5. ACvote MasterFredCommerce Guild(talk) 22:58, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

Object

Freed fanatic
  • In the intro, you should mention that Llem served at Echo Base before you go into the part about the battle of Hoth.
  • "A male soldier in the ground forces of the Rebel Alliance during the Galactic Civil War against the Galactic Empire, L'cayo Llem was stationed on the Outer Rim ice planet Hoth at Echo Base, a secret installation that served as the Rebellion's headquarters, by 3 ABY." I'd recommend splitting this sentence, I'm not into the duel time placement in one sentence especially.
  • "During the base's evacuation, the journalist Corwi Selgrothe backed into Llem, as she had been trying to reach Commander Luke Skywalker for propaganda footage, much to the annoyance of Llem. After she picked up a bag he dropped, the journalist tried to apologize but was cut off when Llem asked her if she knew her assigned GR-75 medium transport." this part flows a little rough so there's couple ways I think this can be tweaked:
    • I'd advise splitting the "annoyance" part into a separate sentence where you mention him dropping his bag rather than bringing the latter part up after it's happened.
    • The second sentence should be centred around Llem rather than Corwi.
    • These changes alright with you? Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 06:46, 30 May 2021 (UTC)
  • "if he was annoyed at all" this part isn't needed. Feel free to snap you Thanos glove.
  • "Selgrothe considered him, like she did all rebels, to be a hero." I feel like this would be better in the bio. It's more Corwi's opinion on him than his personality really. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 08:24, 29 May 2021 (UTC)
  • The equipment quote also doesn't belong here; it's not related enough to the actual bag (and to be honest, I'm on the fence about removing the whole section because it's just a small sentence on him having a bag, but I think an AC's opinion on that might be more valid than mine). Snap it Thanos :P Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 06:46, 30 May 2021 (UTC)
    • Removed quote, and i think the sentence is fine. if we have equipment sections to simply say "x character wore clothing" noting he had a bag is fine. Editoronthewiki (talk) 13:04, 30 May 2021 (UTC)
      • I and some other ACs agree that holding a bag is not enough to merit an Equipment section. One can argue that mentioning an otherwise unnotable bag is unnecessary levels of detail (that is my personal opinion on it), but it could also be integrated into the Biography, if appropriate. 1358 (Talk) 16:05, 30 May 2021 (UTC)
  • The Bio and P&T start with the same thing. I think it'd be best to remove the P&T's first sentence as that just provides a repeat of the context given in the Bio. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 22:49, 9 June 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:58, 1 July 2021 (UTC)