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Kr'saang
- Nominated by: —Axinal Convocation Chamber 23:54, February 28, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: From Knight Errant (novel)
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
- Graestan(Talk) 01:11, March 10, 2011 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:12, March 10, 2011 (UTC)- CC7567 (talk) 18:40, March 11, 2011 (UTC)
- Imperators II 20:23, March 11, 2011 (UTC)
- 1358 (Talk) 21:58, March 11, 2011 (UTC)
Object
Ecks Dee
For starters, all your quotes are currently in violation of Forum:CT:Clarifying use of quote templates.1358 (Talk) 13:38, March 2, 2011 (UTC)- Understood, thanks for pointing that out. Will fix those immediately. —Axinal Convocation Chamber 18:10, March 2, 2011 (UTC)
Graestan
There is information in the infobox and intro which is not included in the biography. Please make certain that the biography is the most complete source of information in the article, which the intro merely summarizes and the infobox displays select facts from. Graestan(Talk) 22:02, March 5, 2011 (UTC)- 2.5 meters and black-furred are both mentioned in P&T section. Is it necessary to include them specifically in the biography? Aside from those two, everything else is there already.—Axinal Convocation Chamber 22:07, March 5, 2011 (UTC)
- Species and gender is what jumped out at me. Graestan(Talk) 03:37, March 6, 2011 (UTC)
- Ah, how silly of me. :P Fixed. Thanks for noticing.—Axinal Convocation Chamber 05:07, March 6, 2011 (UTC)
- Species and gender is what jumped out at me. Graestan(Talk) 03:37, March 6, 2011 (UTC)
- 2.5 meters and black-furred are both mentioned in P&T section. Is it necessary to include them specifically in the biography? Aside from those two, everything else is there already.—Axinal Convocation Chamber 22:07, March 5, 2011 (UTC)
When you say the ambush was to happen at the planet, do you mean on it or at it in space? Figured I'd ask before changing or not changing. Graestan(Talk) 03:32, March 7, 2011 (UTC)- The ambush happened both on the surface and in space. Changed "on" to "at" since the latter makes sense both ways.
"Correctors" is somewhat cumbersome without context. Graestan(Talk) 03:33, March 7, 2011 (UTC)- Added some context. Thanks for the review!—Axinal Convocation Chamber 03:48, March 7, 2011 (UTC)
Toprawa
The Shock Trooper link currently takes us to a disambig page. Can we link to a more specific article, or otherwise create a new relevant one pertaining to this brand of shock troopers? If you really want to put in the effort, you could probably even turn that dismabig page into a regular parent article for shock troopers in general.- Dang, that's irritating. Unfortunately, his troopers are never actually seen in the novel. It makes sense to me to turn the diambig page into a parent article. I'll work on that.
- Ok, just make sure to add Appearances/Sources, before the article gets deleted as unverified. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:12, March 10, 2011 (UTC)
- Dang, that's irritating. Unfortunately, his troopers are never actually seen in the novel. It makes sense to me to turn the diambig page into a parent article. I'll work on that.
Is Uleeta Daiman's one and only aide? The answer to this question may affect the correct use of the comma here: "Daiman then ordered his aide, Uleeta"- I can't say with certainty whether or not Daiman has other aides, but she is really the only one in the novel and the comics that I can see—that is, she's the only non-military individual who assists and responds to him directly.
- In the absence of any evidence to the contrary, we'll just treat her as the sole one. You're good there. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:12, March 10, 2011 (UTC)
- I can't say with certainty whether or not Daiman has other aides, but she is really the only one in the novel and the comics that I can see—that is, she's the only non-military individual who assists and responds to him directly.
The bit about him preferring to be called "Kr'saang the Togorian" is currently exclusive to the intro. Try to work it into either the bio or the P/T.- Addressed.
This bit is currently exclusive to the P/T. While P/T-exclusive info isn't strictly prohibited in the sense that we usually object to intro-exclusive info, P/T info is typically utilized most effectively when the reader has some frame of reference to draw the info back to, such as previously established Bio material. This sentence is written in a very "specialist" manner, meaning someone who is intimately familiar with the canon subject will know what the article is talking about, but someone like myself, who has never read the novel, has really no idea what this is about. My suggestion would be to try and incorporate the substance of this sentence into the Bio first, and then touch upon it again while referencing his impatience in the P/T: "Impatient, he was not afraid to use brute force to get what he wanted, as demonstrated when he pushed ahead of his fellow mercenaries on Darkknell to meet Daiman."Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:47, March 10, 2011 (UTC)- Fixed this and everything else except the shock trooper snag, which I will address shortly. Thanks for the review!—Axinal Convocation Chamber 20:42, March 10, 2011 (UTC)
- Also, I appreciate the copy-edit. Is it necessary to link the word black? That also leads to a disambig page, and if we're going to link color as well, I don't really see the point in linking both. —Axinal Convocation Chamber 20:44, March 10, 2011 (UTC)
- We actually had a CT about that that ended in no-consensus. Basically, one is left with the option of linking to each color or just linking to "Color" once. I'm fine with whichever you choose, as long as it's consistent. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:12, March 10, 2011 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:58, March 11, 2011 (UTC)