- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Kan Pojo
- Nominated by: Chack Jadson (Talk) 21:49, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: ChackProject Death Star continues. Chack Jadson (Talk) 21:49, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
(2 AC/3 users/5 total)
Support
- Well done, especially since there's so little on him to begin with. Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 00:24, 20 November 2008 (UTC) - SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 09:10, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
- IFYLOFD (And now, young Skywalker, you will die.) 00:48, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
--Eyrezer 03:24, 16 December 2008 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:20, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
Object
- Grand Moff Tranner:
In the intro, you mention the moon, and in the next sentence, you're suddenly talking about the conflict taking place in a city. As is, there's really nothing connecting the two to one another.Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 00:06, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
- Tried to add some continuity. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:21, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
The wording of the 2nd - 5th sentences of the intro are very similar to the analogous paragraphs in the bio. Can you reword it a bit, change sentence structure etc, so it's not so similar, please? --Eyrezer 22:22, 12 December 2008 (UTC)- I tried to change it up. Let me know if they're still too similar. Chack Jadson (Talk) 12:49, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
- Toprawa:
Something should probably be done with this title, either italics, capitalization, or both. Can you post the line from the novel for my reference? "and he held the title of fleet shooting champion"- Addressed over IRC. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:05, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
I'd like to see a bit more context here. Having just read this very recently, I remember something about they pretty much surrendered and were unarmed: "Pojo chased two pirates into an alley, and, confident in his abilities, offered them a chance to kill him if he missed."- Addressed. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:05, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
Greater expansion on this would be nice, to elaborate on how Barvel is used to illustrate the similarity: "Much like Vindoo Barvel, Pojo is mentioned only, and serves only to illustrate a point."Toprawa and Ralltiir 08:05, 18 December 2008 (UTC)- Expanded that bit. Thanks for the review. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:05, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:20, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
- All the info that's in the book is here, I believe. No pictures, the P&T is still lacking due to dearth of info available, and this article is short. Around 600 words, I believe. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:21, 20 November 2008 (UTC)