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Kalandis Seven

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Tweaked the wording a bit, you should check out the edit for future reference, and remember to learn from your mistakes ;). Still, keep up the good work. Winterz (talk) 01:37, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 22:48, January 6, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:52, January 8, 2013 (UTC)
  4. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 21:35, January 9, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 04:20, January 10, 2013 (UTC)
  6. ACvote HOORJ! Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 02:10, January 25, 2013 (UTC)

Object

  1. Winterz
    • In the Bts you should specify the article's publication year, considering you already give a month and a day. Plus you should write that the planet was first idenfitified as Kalandis Seven on the same section.
      • Taken care of.
    • Pick up The Essential Atlas and write in the article in which factions' domains the planet's location fell in. If you can't afford the book, the court will assign you one then you can ask me or anyone else who possesses it and is willing to help you with that info.
      • Taken care of.
        • Eh, you can't add them to the affiliations, unless the planet really appears on the map. Instead you must write in the body that "By X DATE it was within the domain of X FACTION" (or something within these lines).
          • Whoops didn't know that, added to history now.
    • As you contextualized a "mission" separated from the battle itself, I think should give it an article, regardless if it belongs to the battle or not. Or you can "un-contextualize" it and say that during the battle, that squad was assigned to do this and that. Either way, you must improve your wording there.
      • Taken care of.
    • Context on the Galactic War.
      • Should be taken care of.
    • Does the source say that the atmosphere is clearly of Type I? If not, then you must pipelink it by only showing the "breathable" part.
      • It's doesn't outright say it, but the fact that a Republic Troopers is breathing it unmasked should be a good sign.
        • I don't think you understood me. In the body you say "The planet featured a Type I atmosphere" and I'm not saying it doesn't, but you should hide the Type I and just say that it featured an atmosphere breathable (pipelinked to Type I) by Humans, unless the source used the exact wording of "Type I atmosphere".
          • My bad, taken care of.
    • An article for Immel's squad.
      • Created.
    • Always remember to capitalize Human (I already corrected that). Otherwise, great work ;). Winterz (talk) 02:08, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
    • Remember to be more careful with punctuation(especially with the comma). Winterz (talk) 13:06, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • How about an article for the mission to destroy the spaceport.
    • It's a part of the overall battle is it needed? If it is I'll make the article.
      • Seems like the battle for the planet is a big enough event that the mission could have its own article.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:55, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
        • Allrighty then. Created.
  • Could you give a little more detail for the events of the mission in the body of the article. A sentence or two would be about right.
    • Taken care of.
  • When you transition to the Clone Wars in the history section, could you give a timeframe so that it is easier to tell that a lot of time passed since the Sith and Republic fought there?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:12, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
  • Could you mention that there was sometimes fog (not water-based fog) on the planet?
    • Taken care of. Wording may need tweaked.
      • I changed it to "waterless fog," but if you think of something better, go ahead and change it.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 19:15, January 6, 2013 (UTC)
  • There are few more things I think you can say from the Atlas maps.
    • On page 120: You can say that the area of space around it was explored between 20,000 and 15,000 BBY.
      • Taken care of.
    • On page 133: It was located in Republic space during the New Sith Wars.
      • Taken care of.
    • On page 226: It was located in Darth Krayt's Galactic Empire. (There isn't a grid, but judging by the regional borders it would have to be inside Krayt's Empire.)
      • Taken care of.
  • Also, I do not think that any of the Atlas maps place it inside Zsinj's Empire.
    • It may just be misreading the map, but on page 196 of the Atlas I believe it shows that N-14 falls within the territory controlled by Zsinj's empire. Please let me know if I misread that. DarthRevan1173 Revan Headshot (Long live Lord Revan) 01:49, January 5, 2013 (UTC)
      • As far as I can tell, N-14 doesn't indicate any government's control on page 196. Zsinj's empire is in the top right area, while N-14 is a little below and to the right of the center.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 19:15, January 6, 2013 (UTC)
  • That should be everything.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:55, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Two things. First, does the source actually use the capitalized term "Imperial Armada"? If not, "armada" should be lowercase.
    • Doesn't use the capitalized term, it's taken care of.
  • As the BTS notes, Essential Reader's Companion refers to the planet as an "alien" world, but the planet is never described as such in the article itself. That term should be included in the Description section someplace. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:51, January 25, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:10, January 25, 2013 (UTC)