Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Kaara

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Kaara

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. 501st dogma(talk) 12:21, September 8, 2014 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:36, October 8, 2014 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:58, October 8, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Supreme Emperor (talk) 00:14, October 9, 2014 (UTC)
  5. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:12, October 9, 2014 (UTC)

Object

One thing
  • "Vran was furious about her death, using his grief in the fight against the Klatooinians." Not seeing how this is relevant here in the P&T. 501st dogma(talk) 00:46, September 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • This was meant to show that he cared about his sister to some degree. Removed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:46, September 8, 2014 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • In the biography, I think it would be better to mention that she had a brother before you mention she was a Sith Saber.
    • Rewrote the first two sentences.
  • Context on the Maw in the bio.
    • Added.
  • "Kaara fought not to scream in pain as the acid destroyed her body and died without saying anything, as it was befitting for a Sith Saber." Could you reword the end of this to sound a little more formal and encyclopedic?
    • What would you like to see changed specifically? I'm sorry, but I fear I don't understand what is un-formal.
  • Would being a Sith Saber mean that she was Force-sensitive? Could you provide a some context on what a Sith Saber is?
    • Rewrote the sentences and added something about both.
  • Does the novel contain the full publication date? If not, you will need to add another source to the BTS; I believe The Essential Reader's Companion has the novel release dates.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 07:25, September 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • Please introduce Turg is some way before you mention him in the P&T. A pipelink isn't really enough.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:44, October 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • I was under the impression that everyone descended from the crash on Kesh was automatically a part of the Lost Tribe of the Sith. If this is correct, you will need to change the part about joining the Lost Tribe of the Sith.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:44, October 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • "a behavior that befitted a Sith Saber" This statement seems rather point-of-view. If it is someone's opinion from the novel, you should mention that. You need to be able to state it as the viewpoint of some in-universe character/group/etc and not just as a general statement of fact.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 06:26, October 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • It is said in the written text, not by any person in the novel. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:47, October 8, 2014 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • Defense is spelled with an s in American English, not a c.
    • Both cases corrected. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:14, September 26, 2014 (UTC)
      • No, I just had to fix three more myself.
        • That's surprising and shocking as well, no idea why the search program did not find them. BTW, the quote is taken verbatim from the novel, so I'm unsure if the change you made to it should stand.
          • I don't know what text you're using, but the versions that I have all use defense. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 23:41, October 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • I noticed a number of errors where you left out grammatical articles, like "an unstable" and "called the Fountain". Please keep an eye out for this in the future. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 03:38, September 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • Your personality and traits section reads rather play-by-play. You can easily change it; "Kaara found her brother's comments to be greatly amusing" would be one example. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 02:09, October 2, 2014 (UTC)

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