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Jedi temple (Alaris Prime)
- Nominated by: Commander Code-8 Hello There! 09:44, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: And to think I tried to get this deleted once.
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Support
- DwartiiDelver (talk) 15:06, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
- JediMasterMacaroni
(Talk) 00:59, 22 April 2021 (UTC) 
1358 (Talk) 17:05, 31 May 2021 (UTC)- UberSoldat93
(talk) 05:30, 1 June 2021 (UTC) - Tommy-Macaroni 11:14, 1 June 2021 (UTC)
Object
Dwartii
Was the holocron actually found in Shoran's camp, or simply nearby? I see Qui-Gon, in his quote used over on the Jedi holocron (Alaris Prime) page, says it was found "near [Shoran's] camp." Or does the game actually show the holocron as inside Shoran's camp, in spite of what Qui-Gon says?DwartiiDelver (talk) 03:19, 17 April 2021 (UTC)- It's the latter. The holocron isn't close to any of Shoran's actual buildings which may be what Qui-Gon is referring to, but it's still within the walls of his camp. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 09:13, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
Ecks
"was constructed" is used in consecutive sentences in the Description. Could we get some variation?- Done.
"The player is instructed to create a generic Padawan unit at the temple which Jinn introduces as Kenobi, although the strategy guide does not identify him." I'm not entirely sure what this sentence is trying to say. I presume it's meant to say that the Padawan is identified as Kenobi by Jinn, in which case the word "whom" rather than "which" would be correct. Furthermore, what's the value in explicitly stating that the strategy guide does not identify Kenobi? To my understanding, its lack of identification does in no way contradict other sources.1358 (Talk) 19:32, 17 May 2021 (UTC)- Updated the language and removed the strategy guide bit. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 07:14, 18 May 2021 (UTC)
In the last intro sentence, it's not perfectly clearly whether Kenobi retrieved the holocron from Alaris Prime (Shoran's camp) or from the Jedi Temple itself. I believe you should be using the past perfect tense, "that had been recovered", if your intention is to say Kenobi retrieved it from Shoran's camp and then stored it in this temple.1358 (Talk) 16:20, 30 May 2021 (UTC)- Any better? Commander Code-8 Hello There! 12:55, 31 May 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
Is there no room for an image (e.g. Chewbacca)?UberSoldat93 (talk) 17:13, 31 May 2021 (UTC)
- Added one of the camp. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 01:35, 1 June 2021 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 11:14, 1 June 2021 (UTC)