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Jarl

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  1. Fan26 (Talk) 20:37, 9 October 2022 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 22:45, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
  3. —spookywillowwtalk 23:59, 9 December 2022 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Commander Code-8 Hello There! 06:03, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:41, 15 January 2023 (UTC)

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Braha
  • "and thought he had shaken them off" who else is a part of them? Prior text only establishes "a Mirialan named Servit asked Jarl". The fact his crew is there is not established until the next sentence. Can the presence of the rest of the crew in the confrontation be established around the start?
    • Reworded.
  • I would like to the synonyms for Jarl and Servit used more so that using the same names twice in fairly close succession can be avoided. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 18:20, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
  • Context for Coruscant in the intro? Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 14:37, 20 November 2022 (UTC)
    • Wouldn't say it's strictly necessary but doesn't hurt, done. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 00:56, 21 November 2022 (UTC)
      • Per some of my comments here, I would argue that it is. Regardless, though, nice work! Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 22:45, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
        • I agree that "on" isn't sufficient context, I just think that the intro can sometimes omit those kinds of details - but like I said, it doesn't hurt. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 15:09, 30 November 2022 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • The paragraphs in the body are long enough that they should probably be split into two separate paragraphs each and the body then split into two or three sub-sections. Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:56, 14 January 2023 (UTC)

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