Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Jarek Yeager's daughter

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Jarek Yeager's daughter

  • Nominated by: Wok142 (talk) 18:59, 1 January 2025 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 21:59, 9 April 2025 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 1077 words (113 introduction, 482 body, 482 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 550 words (83 introduction, 370 body, 97 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:Resistance

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)

(Votes required: 2 AC vote(s) required to reach minimum. Additional 1 user or 1 AC vote required to pass.)

Support

  1. ACvote Lewisr (talk) 03:15, 15 March 2025 (UTC)
  2. SorcererSupreme21 (talk) 01:06, 4 April 2025 (UTC)

Object

Dani
  • Can we get a noteon the artist in the BTS? NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 16:01, 5 January 2025 (UTC)
  • Brandon Auman is the head writer of the series, which I feel is an important note. NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 14:07, 6 January 2025 (UTC)
    • Noted this too. Wok142 (talk) 20:04, 6 January 2025 (UTC)
  • I think the episode Commentary(s) should be checked. Definitely Platform Classic. If you don't have a way to check those, on Monday I'll check myself. NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 15:14, 22 February 2025 (UTC)
    • That would be great if you could check for me, appreciate it. Wok142 (talk) 08:03, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
      • I understand Spooky got you the relevant quotes from the commentary. Lemme know when you update. NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 18:31, 3 March 2025 (UTC)
        • Updates were made. Wok142 (talk) 17:33, 12 March 2025 (UTC)
spookly
  • There's a bit of Justin Ridge talking about Yeager losing his wife and daughter in "Path of Resistance;" either that bit once also prosified, or something from Auman, would make a good BTS quote.—spookywillowwtalk 15:06, 6 January 2025 (UTC)
    • Added a quote from the Auman interview. For the Ridge stuff, he just recounts Kaz finding the photo, is there really anything that needs to be prosified there? Wok142 (talk) 20:04, 6 January 2025 (UTC)
      • Nah not really; would've only been needed to note if Ridge quote was picked for a BTS quote to avoid quote-exclusive info but because its the Auman stuff not needed.—spookywillowwtalk 01:37, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
Lew
  • If the daughter has unspecified pronouns, the uses of she/her etc for the daughter need to be changed Lewisr (talk) 07:14, 27 January 2025 (UTC)
  • I think that Yeager and his wife as the parents should be cited to something other than "Fuel for the Fire," as it doesn't actually say it even if implied Lewisr (talk) 07:14, 27 January 2025 (UTC)
  • The 'later that year' needs a date cite Lewisr (talk) 07:14, 27 January 2025 (UTC)
  • The clothing mentioned should be moved to an equipment section Lewisr (talk) 07:14, 27 January 2025 (UTC)
    • Addressed the above. Wok142 (talk) 06:40, 28 January 2025 (UTC)
      • The first sentence of the biography should be changed instead of the second sentence Lewisr (talk) 19:09, 28 January 2025 (UTC)
        • Like that? Wok142 (talk) 00:32, 29 January 2025 (UTC)
          • Made a slight tweak that reads a bit smoother Lewisr (talk) 20:03, 30 January 2025 (UTC)
  • The BTS and apps section should probably be changed to say the daughter appeared in a photo Lewisr (talk) 07:14, 27 January 2025 (UTC)
    • Is "Pictured in a photo" the right language for that? Wok142 (talk) 06:40, 28 January 2025 (UTC)
      • I would just remove the Po template and say (Appears in photograph), and in the BTS say 'Jarek Yeager's daughter first appeared in a photograph' Lewisr (talk) 19:09, 28 January 2025 (UTC)
        • Handled, thanks. Wok142 (talk) 00:32, 29 January 2025 (UTC)
  • I think the intro could use a 34 ABY date for the last sentence Lewisr (talk) 19:09, 28 January 2025 (UTC)
    • Good shout. Wok142 (talk) 00:32, 29 January 2025 (UTC)
  • The mention in "Rendezvous Point" seems notable to note Lewisr (talk) 20:03, 30 January 2025 (UTC)
    • Should the Biography be split up into a Legacy section given that a good chunk of it is about things that happen after the daughter's passing? Wok142 (talk) 23:54, 30 January 2025 (UTC)
      • In the current 3 paras I'd say probably not, unless you want to split the first para into 2. If you do then it would allow for another quote in the legacy section, but I'll leave the choice down to you Lewisr (talk) 05:47, 31 January 2025 (UTC)
        • Just what I was thinking. Went ahead and did that. Wok142 (talk) 07:18, 31 January 2025 (UTC)
          • The legacy section should still be part of the biography, what I meant was splitting the paragraph that starts with A human female into 2 so you can subsection the biography with a section for the daughter's life and death and then their legacy. My apologies if that wasn't clear Lewisr (talk) 06:41, 1 February 2025 (UTC)
            • Like that? Wok142 (talk) 18:31, 1 February 2025 (UTC)
              • Yep! Thanks, I think the bit in the quote about it being hard enough for Yeager losing one daughter should be added as well Lewisr (talk) 20:11, 4 February 2025 (UTC)
Luca
  • The image cat is interfering with the Appearances section.
    • Not sure what you mean, it seems pretty clean on my end. Wok142 (talk) 08:03, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
      • Per WP:LG/IU in the "Mediacat" section, the Mediacat template should be placed under Appearances only if it doesn't interfere "with the presentation of media titles." I'm not sure if it looks different on your PC, but on mine, it squeezes the titles in the Appearances section. It should probably be placed under "Notes and references." LucaRoR (Talk) 08:45, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
        • Turns out it looks fine on other PCs, I'll strike the objection. We should really standardize this, though. LucaRoR (Talk) 19:23, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
  • In the intro, it is not entirely clear that Speedstar killed them. I think the sentence could be reworded to make it explicit, similar to how it is in the body.
  • I feel like references 7, 8, and 9 could be merged. At least references 7 and 8.
    • Got these two. Wok142 (talk) 08:03, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
  • The second legacy paragraph could use a paragraph break. Then, two sub-headings could probably be added.
    • Re-formatted it to be three paragraphs of more even size - does that work? I personally feel this way is better than two tiny subsections. Wok142 (talk) 08:03, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
      • Looks good! LucaRoR (Talk) 08:45, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure if there is a precedent about this, but linking the family to "daughter" feels kind of weird to me. I think there are better places where you can link it in the body, albeit later in the text. LucaRoR (Talk) 09:52, 22 February 2025 (UTC)
    • Addressed. Wok142 (talk) 08:03, 23 February 2025 (UTC)

Comments

  • Logging note that the SMT has an interview with the writers for The Platform Classic at the start of April. May be worth holding briefly on this for that, just in case, since they may talk about it and IIRC this is close to wordcount.—spookywillowwtalk 19:19, 16 March 2025 (UTC)
    • Ok, will await that potential update. Wok142 (talk) 17:10, 17 March 2025 (UTC)