Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Jak'zin

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Jak'zin

• Nominated by: LucaRoR ^(Talk) 09:59, 3 October 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Body count is 952.
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:CO

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

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Support

1. I think it's at 984, for a Jedi that body count keeps increasing! Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 08:53, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
2. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 02:35, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
3. Fan26 (Talk) 04:15, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
4. UberSoldat93 (talk) 14:31, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
5. 1358 ^(Talk) 17:46, 19 January 2022 (UTC)

Object

Manoof

• Intro notes that Jak'zin was distrustful and aware of his lightsaber colour prior to Dooku revealing his allegiance but the body indicates this happened simultaneously? Intro also mentioned that they defeated the criminals but the body sounds like they were surrounded when the reveal occurred. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 13:49, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Better?
    • Much! Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 08:53, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
• Can you briefly note the aftermath of Jak'zin's mission, similar to a Legacy subsection Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 13:49, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Is this good or would you like more details?
    • That's perfect, I don't think we need too much detail but that brief note is great. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 08:53, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
• Not strictly an objection, but is there a close-up of his lightsaber we could add in the Equipment section? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 13:49, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Added, I've alredy asked someone if they could upload a better version of it, since my monitor isn't great for taking screenshots. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 18:11, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
    • Awesome Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 08:53, 5 November 2021 (UTC)

Editor

• The quote where dooku calls Jak'zin's death a pity can be added to the section where he is betrayed Editoronthewiki (talk) 15:11, 20 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Done, thanks! LucaRoR ^(Talk) 15:20, 20 November 2021 (UTC)

CC

• The first sentence in the second intro paragraph runs on and should be split up Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 06:01, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Split up, thanks! LucaRoR ^(Talk) 07:28, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
• Minor thing: The intro says that the Kaldana were making inroads on Sullust, which isn't really stated in the body Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 06:10, 14 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Added. (I've also taken the liberty to fix the striking in your previous objection, I hope you don't mind). LucaRoR ^(Talk) 07:25, 14 January 2022 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• No context for Serenno.
  • Oops, done. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 14:13, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
• Would like to see more of a description of his robes under Equipment. UberSoldat93 (talk) 08:26, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
  • I've specified the color, the robes are pretty standard, and I personally don't think we need to go into the details. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 14:13, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Ecks Dee

• The intro says he was shot through the chest, and the body says through his back. Which one is correct?
• The first time you mention Sidious by name is at the very end of the bio; it's pipelinked earlier but this mention really comes out of nowhere. You should either mention Sidious by name upon his first mention or add some more context at the end.
  • Both done, thanks! LucaRoR ^(Talk) 15:00, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
• Does the source really use double hyphens for the Equipment quote? 1358 ^(Talk) 14:55, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Yup. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 15:00, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 17:46, 19 January 2022 (UTC)

• Big issue for me is that apart from the Powers and abilities and Equipment sections, the whole article was written by Braha'tok enthusiast. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 22:05, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
  • I see, what would you like me to do? LucaRoR ^(Talk) 04:36, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
    • For the record I'm not bothered with Luca taking the torch on this. I've not touched it in over two years and probably wouldn't have in the future. Besides, the writeup was my work but it's not like it hasn't had some changes since. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 09:00, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
      • Sounds good. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 15:14, 7 October 2021 (UTC)
• Reviewing note: Remember that full sentence image captions need full stops. UberSoldat93 (talk) 08:26, 18 January 2022 (UTC)