Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/JX40 Jailspeeder

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JX40 Jailspeeder

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:34, June 14, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Onwards with the Corporate theme

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:02, June 17, 2014 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 11:57, June 17, 2014 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 02:47, August 9, 2014 (UTC)
  4. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 23:20, August 16, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:47, August 23, 2014 (UTC)
  6. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 02:49, August 25, 2014 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • "The passenger spaces consisted of "prisoner stations" however, which consisted of a set of stationery binders which would hold each of an individual's limbs in place, with the arms above the head." Kill one :P
  • "The speeder was not as heavily armored as some other Security Police vehicles...." You should link to the CSASP here, and give context right away. Right now, it's not obviously clear that it is a Security Police vehicle. 501st dogma(talk) 00:06, June 15, 2014 (UTC)
Lee's charge
  • It required two crew but could carry up to forty five passengers as well as a pair of technicians.: Can we say it needed "two crew" and not "a crew of two"?
    • It already said two crew, but changed to a crew of two since I think thats what you meant? I'll change it back if not. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:04, June 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • Can the quote in picture be used for the article?
  • Nice one. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:59, June 16, 2014 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • As steam jets and stun panels are listed as systems on the vehicle, I have created redlinks for those subjects. As they are in the introduction, you will need to create articles for them.
  • Please include the term "stun panel" in the body of the article.
  • You can also mention that the stun panels could have their power levels adjusted for varying effect and that the could be used both to stun and deal lethal damage to individuals.
  • Han Solo and the Corporate Sector Sourcebook refers to the vehicle as a "mobile detention wagon" and a "repulsorwagon." Please make note of these terms in the article.
    • Added the specific terms. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:53, July 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • The sourcebook also says that the vehicle was not available for sale to the public. Please mention this in the article.
    • That's already in the article "They did not offer the vehicles for public sale". Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:53, July 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • The sourcebook also has fragmentation grenades as the standard armament but mentions that other grenades can be used as well.
  • Speeder is a disambiguation page, please fix all of your links to that page. I know this is more of a sofixit, but I leaving it here as an objection so you can catch it in the future.
  • Please make sure to take a closer look at the source material before your next nomination. You missed a fair amount of information for this article.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 22:52, July 14, 2014 (UTC)
    • I should of read through the stats more carefully since I normally assume they're all game mechanics. I'll take more care to check them in future. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:53, July 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Right now you alternate between JX40 Jailspeeder and JX40 jailspeeder. Please determine which capitalization is correct and edit the article accordingly.
  • Please note that in American English, companies are referred to as singular entities. Here is my edit to show you what I mean. Please go ahead and correct this in your other articles and look out for it in the future.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 04:16, July 18, 2014 (UTC)
    • Taken note of. Thanks for the review! Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:14, July 18, 2014 (UTC)
  • In the description section, you kind of pull mobile detention wagon out of nowhere. I know you mentioned transport wagon earlier, but it is not entirely clear from the article that you are talking about the same thing.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 18:56, July 30, 2014 (UTC)
    • Changed some earlier wording, any better? Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:23, August 6, 2014 (UTC)
Floyd
  • One nitpicky thing: "up to one hundred and sixty kilometers per hour, up to ten meters off the ground." Double "up to". IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:57, July 20, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • I usually don't object to image quality unless something is really poor, but this article's infobox picture is about as shitty as they come. You can actually see the text from the other side of the page. Please upload a higher-quality version. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:53, August 9, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'm afraid I don't have access to a better quality version since I only have a scan of the book. The picture is undeniably awful and I've tagged it for replacement, but I'm not sure where I'd ask others to upload a better version beyond that. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:39, August 10, 2014 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • Reload your infobox.
  • I really don't think the information about its one use in 3 BBY is necessary in the infobox. That's more of a History thing than an intro. If it's your way of stating when the vehicle was used, it can be done far more generally than that.
    • Made more general. Is that better? Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:04, August 18, 2014 (UTC)
  • Is repulsorwagon a word used in the source?
    • Yup. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:04, August 18, 2014 (UTC)
      • Then it should get an article, and should be used in the infobox. It's more specific than repulsorlift transport.
        • The source actually describes its type as a mobile detention transport which is used throughout most of the text and stats and so I've changed it to that. Repulsorwagon is only used once it the description, although I've still redlinked it and will make the article soon. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:43, August 19, 2014 (UTC)
  • You're missing information in the cost field of the infobox.
    • Added that they aren't available. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:04, August 18, 2014 (UTC)
  • Why exactly is the CSA category capitalized? Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:48, August 17, 2014 (UTC)
    • I have no idea, should I move it? Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:04, August 18, 2014 (UTC)
      • Please do. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:26, August 19, 2014 (UTC)
        • Oh, forgot that I can't since it's a category. An admin is going to have to do it. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:43, August 19, 2014 (UTC)
          • .... categories are not moved like pages. The category is changed on the contents and the old one deleted. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:15, August 22, 2014 (UTC)

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