Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/J'Meeb Gumb

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J'Meeb Gumb

Nominated by: Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:18, August 9, 2011 (UTC)
Nomination comments: My first nomination for Project Video Games and part of Project Guineo.

~~If Gumb is wearing goggles, I'm not sure how we can assume that is eye color is red. The goggles themselves could just be tinted red.~~
- Yeah, you're right, removed.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 14:07, August 9, 2011 (UTC)
~~You should mention in the Intro that Fett collected the bounty of Gumb.~~
- Done.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 14:07, August 9, 2011 (UTC)
Otherwise, nice job EJ. I've noticed a great deal of improvement in your writing recently, and I'm very happy to see that. You should be proud. :) Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 13:59, August 9, 2011 (UTC)
- Thank you very much.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 14:07, August 9, 2011 (UTC)

"The facility, which was located the industrial district of the Galactic Republic's capital planet of Coruscant." This sentence isn't finished, it needs to either be carried into the next sentence, or changed around.
- My apologies, that was a bad copyedit on my part. I corrected that myself. Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 14:15, August 9, 2011 (UTC)
~~In the BTS you say that he appeared in the guide first, then the game. But, in the appearances, you say that he appeared in the game first. Which is it?~~
- Fixed.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 14:17, August 9, 2011 (UTC)
Otherwise it looks good. Another masterpiece EJ! Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 14:12, August 9, 2011 (UTC)

~~Can anything be said in the P&T of his rigging of the sabbac match, or of the fact that he worked in the death sticks business?~~
- Well, I don't really think that it can be said for sure that he knew he was in the death stick business. This is due to the fact that there was a another Guineo working at Haugg Nerf that did not know that he was guarding death sticks. I mentioned Gumb's cheating at sabacc in the P&T, but I'm not sure if I worded it right. Any suggestions?--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 22:18, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
- Nah, it's fine. CC7567 ^(talk) 22:47, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
I was rather surprised (and a little disappointed) with the number of careless errors that I found in the article, especially given the fact that it's already received two reviews. I would encourage more thoroughness for all involved. CC7567 ^(talk) 21:09, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
- Yikes, I guess I should pay better attention, sorry about that, I'll try to do better in the future.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 22:18, August 10, 2011 (UTC)

I think the last sentence of the bio's main paragraph ("During the same year... death stick demand.") could be reworded to improve the flow a bit. Specifically, I believe it would be better if you tried to mention the Bando Gora only once, preferably at the end of the sentence.
- Reworded. Any better?--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 16:33, August 15, 2011 (UTC)
  - Exactly what I was looking for. Nice job. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 18:59, August 15, 2011 (UTC)
Regardless, good work. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 16:21, August 15, 2011 (UTC)

~~This sentence in the P&t section is choppy: He stood over two meters in height, and he had some knowledge on how to use a blaster. consider revising. Otherwise another great article EJ!~~--Talrrivanian ^{(Headquarters)} 07:47, August 17, 2011 (UTC)
- Good catch, reworked P&T.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 12:14, August 17, 2011 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 14:11, August 17, 2011 (UTC)