Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Ithia

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Ithia

• Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 23:05, 8 May 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Hidden One nom#4, as promised

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. CC7567 ^(talk) 01:21, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
2. How can I not support this one after all the others? :p Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 14:37, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
3. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 06:00, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
4. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 21:09, 17 May 2009 (UTC)
5. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 21:12, 17 May 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. The clone cannot think of a catchy title
   • In the intro, were the Skywalkers originally searching for information, or did they go to Dorin specifically to question Ziil?
     • Specified.
   • The use of "so" after a comma is colloquial; please reword. It's used this way in two places.
     • Addressed.
   • "Weakened greatly" is a bit choppy; it sounds like it suddenly ended instead of taking place overtime. I'm not entirely sure which way it happened.
     • Addressed.
   • Unclear as to whether the Skywalkers returned to the surface with the Hidden Ones.
     • Addressed.
   • "prior to Chara joining the sect": the "Chara joining the sect" isn't a noun and needs to be corrected.
     • Better?
   • In P&T, Ithia is stated to be the best fighter of the Order, while in P&A she was believed to be the best fighter.
     • Better?
   • Your writing is continually improving; keep up the good work. CC7567 ^(talk) 23:58, 8 May 2009 (UTC)
     • Thank you :) Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 01:16, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
2. Too... many... Hidden Ones...:
   • "Luke eventually defeated Ziil in a battle of Force powers, and Ithia and the Hidden Ones were allowed to return to the surface of Dorin and life." I don't think the "and life" part is appropriate here, since they were already alive, unless you want to contextify it with the fact that Luke thought they were losing their livelihood, or that they had to pretend they were dead to the outside world.
     • Removed.
   • Wasn't Ithia one of the few Baran Do trained in combat? Add this to her Early life.
     • Added.
   • Add the fact that Hidden Ones changed their names earlier, since Ithia probably isn't her real name.
     • Added.
   • Other than that, good job as always. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 16:50, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
     • Thanks for the review. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 17:40, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
3. Soresu
   • Ithia and the Hidden Ones were allowed to return to the surface of Dorin. I little misleading. Ithia had voluntarily been a member of the Hidden Ones, so even if they had been allowed to return eariler, she would have chosen to stay.
     • Addressed.
       • You should probably also add why she chose to return. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 04:56, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
         • It's stated earlier in the article that Ithia and the Hidden Ones had begun to turn against Ziil, and in the novel there is no further information about why they left than that. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 05:55, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
           • Sorry, I should be more specific from now on. I mean in the intro. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 08:08, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
             • It's ok. Fixed now. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 13:10, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
   • Master of the Order Koro Ziil. Master of the Order of what? SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 00:53, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
     • Changed. Thanks for the review. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 00:59, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
       • It's also in the bio. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 04:56, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
         • Whoops, missed that. Fixed now. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 05:48, 10 May 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:22, 18 May 2009 (UTC)