Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Isila Drutch

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Isila Drutch

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 12:17, June 11, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Femtrooper? Not so much.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 18:37, June 18, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Just so you know, I added a redlink for the cantina.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:00, July 5, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:00, July 19, 2012 (UTC)
  4. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 21:38, July 25, 2012 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Menkooroo (talk) 16:56, July 26, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  • Eras - if you establish that she was alive in Rise of the Empire era and the NJO era, then it stands to reason she was present in the Rebellion and NR eras. Theses need to be added to the eras field and the infobox.
    • I asked the same question on a SH forum, and let it be after the response, though I will add it any way. Done.
  • Isila Drutch, a female, was from the New Territories planet of Parshoone,[1] and was born prior to 10 BBY[2] to a man serving on the Galactic Republic Tector-class Star Destroyer Archer at the end of the Clone Wars, a conflict between the Confederacy of Independent Systems and the Republic, which would later be transformed into the Galactic Empire. This sentence is too long and should be broken up. Also, there is no evidence that her father was aboard the Archer when she was born which this sentence implies. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 10:13, June 18, 2012 (UTC)
    • Done and thanks for the review. 501st dogma(talk) 11:51, June 18, 2012 (UTC)
Cade
  • "...became a stormtrooper in the 291st Legion Dalisor and was given the designation TD-4388. She became the first female stormtrooper in her company..." You have the first stormtrooper linking to Stormtrooper, and the second to Stormtrooper Corps. I'd switch those around and reword the sentence to differentiate, because right now it looks like a double link. Try something like "... became a member of the Stormtrooper Corps in the 291st Legion Dalisor and was given the designation TD-4388. She became the first female stormtrooper in her company..." That way, it shows that the two links are different. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 21:24, July 25, 2012 (UTC)
    • Good catch. Done. 501st dogma(talk) 21:32, July 25, 2012 (UTC)
Yo
  • In ref [2], can you indicate where all that info comes from? Adding something "all facts established in Warfare" at the end would do it; otherwise all that info is left sourceless.
    • Well, I was hoping you would give your own twist to it. :P Spell out the full book title. Menkooroo (talk) 02:42, July 26, 2012 (UTC)
      • Sorry about that. This better? 501st dogma(talk) 11:28, July 26, 2012 (UTC)
  • Can you give a brief description of what femtrooper gear is in the bio? The passage is a little confusing until the reader reads the end of "Personality and traits."
    • Sorry, I meant in the bio. The P&T description was fine. Menkooroo (talk) 02:42, July 26, 2012 (UTC)
      • Better?
  • If she's still with the 291st in 33 ABY, mention that the Galactic Empire is no more and that there's an Imperial Remnant now. Menkooroo (talk) 22:20, July 25, 2012 (UTC)
    • All done. Thanks for reviewing, 501st dogma(talk) 22:41, July 25, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:44, July 27, 2012 (UTC)


  • Not sure about the eras. 501st dogma(talk) 12:17, June 11, 2012 (UTC)