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Ipsium
- Nominated by: Erebus Chronus (Talk) 00:40, 19 September 2023 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: this one fascinated me since the episode
- Date Archived: 01:59, 1 November 2023 (UTC)
- Final word count: 946 words (179 introduction, 741 body, 26 behind the scenes)
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Support
Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:31, 27 September 2023 (UTC)- Lewisr (talk) 03:56, 1 October 2023 (UTC)
—spookywillowwtalk 04:32, 24 October 2023 (UTC)- Panther436 (talk) 19:42, 31 October 2023 (UTC)
- Bonzane10 (holonet) 01:53, 1 November 2023 (UTC)
Object
Anil
In the intro, Benni killing Mokko is not entirely accurate since he was trying to save him.- Benni doesn't kill him and I believe that "ultimately" works toward expressing that. I can change it if necessary, though.
Unless it's outright said in the episode or one of the sources, I'm not sure if the title of "crime lord" is fitting for Mokko.- removed.
"Mokko sold the gathered minerals he claimed were degrading and used the profits to feed his workers, who had fought for the position of 'top earner'" Even though it's explained in the next subsection, I think this gives the wrong impression on how Mokko spent the profits. Introducing his deception before it was discovered by his crew would also be more chronological in the article. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 23:03, 21 September 2023 (UTC)
- I don't entirely understand. Are you saying I should move something to earlier or later in the article? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 16:54, 22 September 2023 (UTC)
- I'd say yes. Mokko's deception began before the Bad Batch arrived, and introducing that along with the inner workings of Mokkotown would be more suitable, imo. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 18:29, 22 September 2023 (UTC)
- How's that? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 03:47, 27 September 2023 (UTC)
- Great! Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 15:19, 27 September 2023 (UTC)
- Great!
- How's that? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 03:47, 27 September 2023 (UTC)
- I'd say yes. Mokko's deception began before the Bad Batch arrived, and introducing that along with the inner workings of Mokkotown would be more suitable, imo.
- I don't entirely understand. Are you saying I should move something to earlier or later in the article? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 16:54, 22 September 2023 (UTC)
One last thing from me: The BTS note from the SW.com is not wrong of course, but I think it seems like trivia about explosive minerals in Star Wars in general rather than actual BTS information about ipsium. What do you think? Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 15:19, 27 September 2023 (UTC)
- decided to remove. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 19:39, 27 September 2023 (UTC)
Lew
The Techno Union and Bad Batch could use some context in the intro- Added.
You could add a date to the intro- Added. not really sure what to go with.
Is the episode in around 18 BBY or outright 18 BBY? The history is a little inconsistentLewisr (talk) 05:06, 30 September 2023 (UTC)- how's that? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 03:43, 1 October 2023 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:58, 1 November 2023 (UTC)