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Invasion of Saleucami
- Nominated by: Editoronthewiki (talk) 13:07, 12 November 2021 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Next up in my duology of Clone Wars battles that grew too big for CAN
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UberSoldat93 
(talk) 05:27, 1 March 2022 (UTC)- NBDani (talk) 12:08, 2 March 2022 (UTC)
- Samonic
(Ah, yes. The negotiator.) 16:30, 2 March 2022 (UTC) 
1358 (Talk) 16:39, 2 March 2022 (UTC)- OOM 224 18:19, 2 March 2022 (UTC)
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Luca
The prelude is quite long considering that the actual invasion is only two sentences long. Could it be shortened?- Its all relevant information so it is okay Editoronthewiki (talk) 19:00, 14 December 2021 (UTC)
Is there no available quote for the Invasion section?LucaRoR (Talk) 09:38, 11 December 2021 (UTC)
- Nope Editoronthewiki (talk) 19:00, 14 December 2021 (UTC)
Ecks
I agree with Luca that the Prelude is excessive. Most of the first paragraph belongs in the Prelude of Battle of Saleucami, not this article.- Cut down, I think the rest remains revelant because this is still a battle for salecuami, so how much it was involved and its peoples thoughts on the war matter Editoronthewiki (talk)|
You don't actually say in The invasion that the CIS successfully invaded the planet. You can launch an invasion without succeeding.- Removed speculation Editoronthewiki (talk) 18:13, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
What's the significance of Has Obitt missing the invasion?1358 (Talk) 09:50, 23 January 2022 (UTC)- First mention of the invasion was that fact. same for Sneak attack on Roche Editoronthewiki (talk) 18:13, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
- How does the source present this? Was Obitt supposed to be on Saleucami or was he on his way there, or why is this relevant? 1358 (Talk) 21:25, 26 January 2022 (UTC)
- "Even after the abduction and rescue op with Orson Krennic had made him unwelcome in Separatist space, [Has Obitt] had managed to stay busy. Arrested on Celanon for blockade running, he had been bailed out by the Republic. He had had two freighters shot out from under him, but with Krennic’s help had been able to purchase replacements at cost. He lost one crew, gained another; narrowly missed the invasion of Saleucami only to end up smack in the middle of the sneak attack on Roche. The end of the war had found him in Sy Myrthian space doing scut work for a local Hutt." Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:31, 27 January 2022 (UTC)
- I see. I think it'd be better to mention him being unwelcome in Separatist space rather than being allied with the Republic. "Has Obitt, a Dressellian smuggler whose previous <adventures, whatever> had made him unwelcome in Separatist space, narrowly missed..." or something along those lines. 1358 (Talk) 21:03, 7 February 2022 (UTC)
- Done :) Editoronthewiki (talk) 19:08, 16 February 2022 (UTC)
- I see. I think it'd be better to mention him being unwelcome in Separatist space rather than being allied with the Republic. "Has Obitt, a Dressellian smuggler whose previous <adventures, whatever> had made him unwelcome in Separatist space, narrowly missed..." or something along those lines. 1358 (Talk) 21:03, 7 February 2022 (UTC)
- "Even after the abduction and rescue op with Orson Krennic had made him unwelcome in Separatist space, [Has Obitt] had managed to stay busy. Arrested on Celanon for blockade running, he had been bailed out by the Republic. He had had two freighters shot out from under him, but with Krennic’s help had been able to purchase replacements at cost. He lost one crew, gained another; narrowly missed the invasion of Saleucami only to end up smack in the middle of the sneak attack on Roche. The end of the war had found him in Sy Myrthian space doing scut work for a local Hutt." Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:31, 27 January 2022 (UTC)
- How does the source present this? Was Obitt supposed to be on Saleucami or was he on his way there, or why is this relevant? 1358 (Talk) 21:25, 26 January 2022 (UTC)
- First mention of the invasion was that fact. same for Sneak attack on Roche Editoronthewiki (talk) 18:13, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
"the invasion of Saleucami was a massive invasion of the Outer Rim planet Saleucami undertaken by the Confederacy of Independent Systems during the Clone Wars against the Galactic Republic." Yes, an invasion is an invasion. This is redundant wording.- Reworded Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:31, 27 January 2022 (UTC)
I'm presuming no relevant quotes for the Invasion and Aftermath sections are available?1358 (Talk) 21:25, 26 January 2022 (UTC)- None for invasion, added one for aftermath Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:33, 27 January 2022 (UTC)
UberSoldat
Let's see some context for the Foundry.UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:53, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
- That good? Editoronthewiki (talk) 15:01, 28 February 2022 (UTC)
Dani
Could the invasion section be reworded to drop the sourcing of Outer Rim world? It's technically defined as an Outer Rim world in the prelude and doesn't seem relevant to the invasion section.NBDani (talk) 21:59, 24 February 2022 (UTC)- Ah, fixed, sorry that was left over from its CAN days Editoronthewiki (talk) 14:56, 28 February 2022 (UTC)
Does the information involving the Galactic Empire's interest in Saleucami belong in Aftermath? Feels more relevant to the war's aftermath than the invasion.NBDani (talk) 21:59, 24 February 2022 (UTC)- I would argue its relevant, since its the invasion that kicked off this era of violence Editoronthewiki (talk) 14:56, 28 February 2022 (UTC)
Comments
- Some detail has been removed from the prologue Editoronthewiki (talk) 18:44, 12 January 2022 (UTC)
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:19, 2 March 2022 (UTC)