Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Ingoda

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Ingoda

• Nominated by: Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 04:53, June 13, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: I noticed I haven't done a Character GAN in like 10 noms, so I decided to fix that mistake.

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. CC7567 ^(talk) 04:04, June 16, 2011 (UTC)
2. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:53, June 16, 2011 (UTC)
3. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 13:03, June 17, 2011 (UTC)
4. 1358 ^(Talk) 06:02, June 20, 2011 (UTC)
5. My only objection was so very niggly that it doesn't really matter. Unless you really wanna make a stub for that redlink in the article. Trak Nar ^{Ramble on} 06:06, June 20, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Attack of the Clone

• Does the CSWE expand more upon the fact that he was a "minor" crime lord? I get what you're trying to say, but it comes off as a little ambiguous. Do you mean "minor" in reputation, minor in power, or something like that? Please clarify if possible.
  • All the CSWE says is that "The Hutt was a minor crime lord who collected Theelin slaves." Not sure what else I can say for that.
• Just a note about en dashes: in regards to compound words, they're only used to link a word with two or more words, i.e. "Galactic Senate–bashing senator." All other two-word compound words, like "Theelin-halfbreed," make use of the regular dash, even if they're not common. Don't worry; I had the same problem with WP:DASH a while back too. :P CC7567 ^(talk) 00:28, June 16, 2011 (UTC)
  • Death to Dashes! :P Thanks for the advice and the review CC. Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 03:25, June 16, 2011 (UTC)

Moffship

• "...Ingoda enjoyed accumulating Theelin slaves, an artistic but increasingly rare species..." - For both this sentence in the intro and this similar sentence in the bio, the placement of the context implies that "Theelin slaves" is the artistic and rare species. Please rephrase.
  • How does that look Tranner?
    • You should probably get rid of "for a hobby" in the intro, as it could also mean Ingoda used the Theelin slaves for another hobby. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 21:22, June 16, 2011 (UTC)
      • Done. Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 07:30, June 17, 2011 (UTC)
• That's it. Good work. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 15:34, June 16, 2011 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review. Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 16:45, June 16, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 06:07, June 20, 2011 (UTC)