Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Hurst

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Hurst

• Nominated by: IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 05:45, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Darth Bane had daddy issues.

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. --Darth tom (Imperial Intelligence) 14:59, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
2. —Master Jonathan^{(Jedi Council Chambers)} 20:46, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
3. Well done. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 02:02, 12 July 2009 (UTC)
4. CC7567 ^(talk) 22:36, 13 July 2009 (UTC)
5. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 00:24, 15 July 2009 (UTC)
6. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:53, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
7. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 08:15, 19 July 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. From the Council Chambers:
   • Can you try to vary "drunken rages" a bit? Currently it's used three times.
     • Varied. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 20:42, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
   • Otherwise very good. —Master Jonathan^{(Jedi Council Chambers)} 20:40, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
2. From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
   • Place of death should be in the infobox.
     • Addressed.
   • Hurst's debt should be first mentioned before you state that he died. Otherwise, well done. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 13:37, 10 July 2009 (UTC)
     • Addressed. Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 01:15, 12 July 2009 (UTC)
3. The Grand Master
   • "In 1,008 BBY, Hurst died of a massive heart attack, and his son would go on to be the Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Bane." The last part of the sentence seems a little out of place. Could it be reworded slightly?
     • Addressed.
   • You mention a couple of times Hurst's life problems. Could you specify what these are? (If this is meant to refer simply to the gambling and drinking, could you make the connection a little clearer?)
     • Addressed.
   • At the end of the bio you say that Bane speculated that he killed Hurst with the Force, while in the P&t you say that he did kill him with the Force. Please clear this up.
     • Addressed.
   • Nice work. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 02:55, 14 July 2009 (UTC)
     • Addressed. Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 21:46, 14 July 2009 (UTC)
4. Soresu
   • Far too many sentences beginm with Hurst and Dessel in the bio. Please vary it a bit.
     • Addressed.
   • Mention in the intro that his death was caused by Bane. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 08:39, 16 July 2009 (UTC)
     • Addressed. Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 00:47, 19 July 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 08:17, 19 July 2009 (UTC)