Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Hostis Ij

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Hostis Ij

• Nominated by: Geek'ari (talk) 01:26, April 12, 2016 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: I originally nominated this for CA, but in the revisions I made to make it better, it passed 250 words xD

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. Nice work. -Clonehunter^{(Report your W.M.D.)} 16:44, April 14, 2016 (UTC)
2. ProfessorTofty (talk) 23:47, April 14, 2016 (UTC)
3. Good stuff --Lewisr (talk) 23:52, April 14, 2016 (UTC)
4. Looks beautiful - LoLuX12 (walkietalkie) 23:56, April 14, 2016 (UTC)
5. Watch your use of the character's first name in place of surname - surname should always be used when referring to the character. - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 21:36, June 4, 2016 (UTC)
   • Yes sir, I'll remember that. Sorry for the mistake, thanks for the help! It's fixed now. Geek'ari _Talk 13:09, June 6, 2016 (UTC)
6. Another note: Don't strike people's objections after you think you've addressed them. Just because you've answered them doesn't necessarily mean the reviewer considers them adequately addressed. Wait for the reviewer to do it. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 01:49, June 7, 2016 (UTC)
   • Ah, OK, sorry about that Geek'ari _Talk 02:43, June 7, 2016 (UTC)
7. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:26, June 30, 2016 (UTC)

Object

• If I'm not mistaken, stuff that's mentioned in a quote should only be linked in the quote if it isn't mentioned in the article. Therefore, I would say clear the links from the quote and link them in the intro section instead. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:37, April 14, 2016 (UTC)
  • Fixed Geek'ari _Talk 20:04, April 14, 2016 (UTC)
• Seeing some other terms in the biography that could be linked - these include "death," "blood" and "days." Also, again, anything linked the intro has to be in the body also, so that would include "Mon Mothma." ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:37, April 14, 2016 (UTC)
  • OK, I added the links for those, plus one for "village" (city). Geek'ari _Talk 20:04, April 14, 2016 (UTC)
• In the novel, Mothma brings Ij and Korbin to Nalool to see the price of war. However, I don't think this really made clear in the article. The intro does mention that the Military Disarmament Act is proposed on Nalool, but the biography only refers to the fact of Mothma herself visiting the planet, not really making clear in the text that Ij and Korbin were there with her to witness the devastation. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:37, April 14, 2016 (UTC)
  • I added some context in the first Biography paragraph. They went to Naalol to "assess the aftermath of the fighting"Geek'ari _Talk 20:04, April 14, 2016 (UTC)
• Your behind-the-scenes makes reference to the concept of "shoulder angel" / "shoulder devil" a human analogy that I'm not sure is present in the Star Wars universe or actually referenced specifically in the text. While it kinda seems to fit, it might be better to word it another way, rather than trying to reference this particular concept. ProfessorTofty (talk) 19:37, April 14, 2016 (UTC)
  • It's an analogy used in the novel. I think this wiki treats such analogies as in-universe, right? Geek'ari _Talk 20:04, April 14, 2016 (UTC)
    • The analogy is used? Okay, sorry, I missed that. No worries then. ProfessorTofty (talk) 23:46, April 14, 2016 (UTC)

Floyd

Just a couple objections here:

• First, need context on Naalol in the intro.
  • Fixed Geek'ari _Talk 13:09, June 6, 2016 (UTC)
• You also have to introduce who Hostis Ij is in the bio. The intro is meant to just be a general overview, the same information on exactly who he is has to also be in the body of the article itself.
  • And fixed Geek'ari _Talk 13:09, June 6, 2016 (UTC)
• All in all, solid work. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 03:33, June 5, 2016 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:26, June 30, 2016 (UTC)