- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.
Holshef
- Nominated by: ProfessorTofty (talk) 18:43, August 15, 2015 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Newest nomination from the Star Wars Rebels spinoff series Servants of the Empire. Spent the past couple of weeks or so getting the necessary redlinked articles created and after looking this over once more, I'm ready for the nomination. ProfessorTofty (talk) 18:43, August 15, 2015 (UTC)
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Support
- Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:13, August 16, 2015 (UTC)
Sir Cavalier of One
(Squadron channel) 15:09, September 7, 2015 (UTC)- 501st dogma(talk) 22:29, September 13, 2015 (UTC)
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Ayrehead
Wispy isn't a description of color, so I'm not sure it should be included in the hair color field of the infobox.Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:51, August 16, 2015 (UTC)- Changed to simply "White." ProfessorTofty (talk) 15:38, August 16, 2015 (UTC)
Could you mention who Governor Pryce is?Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:51, August 16, 2015 (UTC)- Edited to describe her specifically as "Governor of Lothal." Is that enough? I don't think more is really relevant to the article. ProfessorTofty (talk) 15:38, August 16, 2015 (UTC)
A bit more context on Merei is needed.Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:51, August 16, 2015 (UTC)- Added content explaining why she was involved with the Gray Syndicate. ProfessorTofty (talk) 15:38, August 16, 2015 (UTC)
Cav
First paragraph of Biography is unreffed. I assume its to Imperial Justice, but I haven't read the book.- Right, okay. I was basically intending for the second paragraph reference to reference the entire thing. I forgot about the paragraph-by-paragraph. Added. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:57, August 20, 2015 (UTC)
Did Spanjaf take the bounter hunter to Holshef? It's a little unclear. The intro makes it sound like he was given to the bounty hunter, the bio is more ambiguous.- Sir Cavalier of One(Squadron channel) 22:14, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
- The book doesn't say that she does, but then again, it doesn't say that she doesn't. I think the strong implication is that she doesn't because A.) she liked Holshef and didn't want to do such a thing to him and B.) with Laxo toasted by the Empire, she would have no reason to, since only Laxo knew that she was the one that had been tasked with taking the bounty hunter to him. I've edited the article to try to make things a bit more clear, but it's sort of like what I was discussing here with Voorpee in relation to the fact that we're dealing with a situation where the exact details simply aren't stated explicitly in the book. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:57, August 20, 2015 (UTC)
- Unfortunately, the additions now take on the air of speculation. I was mainly concerned not by the book's depiction of events, but consistency in the article. The intro reads as if Holshef was taken, the bio did not. They should be more in sync with one another is the point I was trying to make. I would take the additions out, and attempt to reword either the intro or bio (the intro would be my choice) for consistency within the article. Either that, or addressing the ambiguity in the BTS might be the way to go. - Sir Cavalier of One
(Squadron channel) 01:23, August 28, 2015 (UTC)
- Alright. I've restored the bio to its previous state and kept things more vague in the intro. I've also added a bit to the Behind the scenes about it. ProfessorTofty (talk) 18:39, August 28, 2015 (UTC)
- Unfortunately, the additions now take on the air of speculation. I was mainly concerned not by the book's depiction of events, but consistency in the article. The intro reads as if Holshef was taken, the bio did not. They should be more in sync with one another is the point I was trying to make. I would take the additions out, and attempt to reword either the intro or bio (the intro would be my choice) for consistency within the article. Either that, or addressing the ambiguity in the BTS might be the way to go. - Sir Cavalier of One
- The book doesn't say that she does, but then again, it doesn't say that she doesn't. I think the strong implication is that she doesn't because A.) she liked Holshef and didn't want to do such a thing to him and B.) with Laxo toasted by the Empire, she would have no reason to, since only Laxo knew that she was the one that had been tasked with taking the bounty hunter to him. I've edited the article to try to make things a bit more clear, but it's sort of like what I was discussing here with Voorpee in relation to the fact that we're dealing with a situation where the exact details simply aren't stated explicitly in the book. ProfessorTofty (talk) 21:57, August 20, 2015 (UTC)
501st
"Laxo sold Holshef to a bounty hunter.." Is sold really the correct word?501st dogma(talk) 00:24, September 10, 2015 (UTC)- I believe so. It's the word that Laxo himself uses. "I just sold Holshef to a bounty hunter. The hunter will be here in a hour." ProfessorTofty (talk) 04:53, September 12, 2015 (UTC)