Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Goril Sevintran

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Goril Sevintran

  • Nominated by: Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 19:00, January 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Project Hero brings you the first in a string of ten or so relatively short (mostly) GANs.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Did a copy-edit. As I am not as familiar with TOR as others, since I don't play it, I may have missed something. Trak Nar Ramble on 06:08, January 27, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Winterz (talk) 19:35, January 29, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:38, January 30, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:39, February 2, 2013 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Menkooroo (talk) 23:29, February 4, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Horn
  • Is there anything more you can say in the bio? It ends by saying that he was among the first group of Jedi sent to Corellia, but as the leading quote says "I arrived with the first wave. Now I serve among the last." I can't help but wonder if there's more to say. What does "Now I serve among the last" mean? Were a bunch of his compatriots slain in the battle? Since we know that he's proficient in lightsaber combat, can we say in the bio that he fought in the battle with his lightsaber? The bio currently ends by saying that he was sent to Corellia, but it doesn't detail what he does while on-world. Kind of reads as if his story ends before he arrives on-planet. I get that the assumed-light-side-Praven-thing limits what the bio can say, but I feel like there's at least something that can be said about his role in the battle itself. Seems like he still fights in the battle even if he doesn't speak to the Hero in the Blastfield Shipyards.
    • How about now?
  • The infobox lists Galactic Republic as an affiliation, and while the intro gets this info across, the article body doesn't --- it mentions the Republic, but in a way that seems to imply that they were allies of the Jedi and that Goril wasn't affiliated with the Republic per se, but only with their Jedi allies. Can you make it clear that he serves the Republic, too? Menkooroo (talk) 14:48, February 3, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:55, February 4, 2013 (UTC)