Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Generalirius

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Generalirius

• Nominated by: Samonic ^(Talk) 17:53, 6 April 2023 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Infinite slots, infinite Kiljis
• Date Archived: 14:42, 9 June 2023 (UTC)
• Final word count: 532 words (109 introduction, 363 body, 60 behind the scenes)
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:CHISS WP:NOVELS

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Support

BloodOfIrizi^(Syndicure) 19:01, 10 April 2023 (UTC) (Vote struck, reason: Per policy: Blocked user -- Imperators II^(Talk) 10:16, 10 May 2023 (UTC))

1. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:02, 6 June 2023 (UTC)
2. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 09:57, 8 June 2023 (UTC)
3. Fan26 (Talk) 05:22, 9 June 2023 (UTC)
4. —spookywilloww^talk 14:41, 9 June 2023 (UTC)

Object

Generalissimo Ziara

• i think you should note the circumstances of Nakirre's murder in the intro (ie. thrawn's last stand)
• The generalirius commanded the Illumine's battle fleet, the Illumine Kilhorde, and led the followers of the Illumine's religion. this can be summed up into "the generalirius served as the illumine's military and religious leader"
• i suppose this is a personal preference but core names should be mentioned for all the chiss, even if they're mentioned only once
  • I don't really agree with these. The intro should be brief, mentioning that Nakirre was killed by Jixtus at Sunrise is enough. (Thrawn's last stand began after Nakirre's murder) I think mentioning the vassals and the Kilhorde is okay, honestly. Samonic ^(Talk) 11:14, 7 April 2023 (UTC)
• you've got quite a few sentences that have too many clauses, id recommend splitting some sentences/using less commas
  • Rewrote a few. Samonic ^(Talk) 17:03, 7 April 2023 (UTC)
• i'd mention a bit more of Jixtus' motives in the body (conquering/destroying the ascendancy)
  • Not really relevant to the title of generalirius, mentioning that he and Nakirre were instigating a Chiss civil war is enough. Samonic ^(Talk) 17:03, 7 April 2023 (UTC)
• history, paragraph 1: you should reword the last sentence. I would mention that ar'alani destroyed the hopebreaker first and later reminisced on the commander's choice of words
  • Done. Samonic ^(Talk) 17:03, 7 April 2023 (UTC)
• (review note): copy edit and as always, shoot me a DM when you've handled these because i'll probably forget :P
• i know you like keeping intro's compact, but the reason Jixtus murdered Nakirre should be briefly mentioned BloodOfIrizi^(Syndicure) 22:49, 7 April 2023 (UTC)
  • Done. Samonic ^(Talk) 08:09, 8 April 2023 (UTC)

Brahalirius

• Nakirre's context as a Kilji is intro exclusive. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 17:12, 5 June 2023 (UTC)
  • Added Lewisr (talk) 20:43, 5 June 2023 (UTC)

Comments

• I have a bad feeling about this one. :P Samonic ^(Talk) 17:53, 6 April 2023 (UTC)
• Handling objections Lewisr (talk) 20:41, 5 June 2023 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 14:41, 9 June 2023 (UTC)