- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.
Garth Breise
- Nominated by: OtterSurf (talk) 17:25, September 11, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I've pumped this puppy up and think it's ready to go. OtterSurf (talk) 17:25, September 11, 2012 (UTC)
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Code-8
The intro needs expanding. Say about what he did on his job and elaborate more on his death. Also put the paragraphs back together.Put the paragraphs back together in the first part of the bio too.--Commander Code-8 (talk) 07:07, September 19, 2012 (UTC)
Floyd
- No intro refs.
- Use {{Ref| only in the infobox.
- More actual narrative of his life is needed in the intro. You mention that he had the "dubious prestige" of being one of the first to die at the hands of a Yuuzhan Vong, but no real info on this event is given.
- You need to mention his species and gender in the body.
- The bio is short enough that I don't think a separate subsection is needed for "Death".
- You need to identify ExGal as the Extragalactic Society at some point in the body. Really try to treat the intro and body as two separate entities: everything in the intro also should appear in the body.
- If you're only using one reference for a paragraph, you only need one ref tag, at the end of the paragraph.
- Context on the Yuuzhan Vong.
- Linking issues. Articles should only be linked once in the intro and once in the body - no more, no less.
- Always call people by their last names.
- The article itself is well-written. Just fix these issues and you should be good to go. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:50, September 26, 2012 (UTC)
Comments
Vote to remove nomination (AC only)
Unaddressed objections over two weeks old. - Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 14:34, October 15, 2012 (UTC)- CC7567 (talk) 00:42, October 16, 2012 (UTC)
—Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 23:01, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
