Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Gaan

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Gaan

  • Nominated by: —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 01:38, July 29, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Dude didn't get ID'd until the CSWE came out…

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Pre-nom reviewed. —Master Jonathan New Jedi Order (Jedi Council Chambers) 01:48, July 29, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:10, August 2, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Menkooroo 07:27, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
  4. -- 1358 (Talk) 18:43, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:07, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 14:28, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
  7. ACvote Yes, you do, Shaggy. Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:05, September 3, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Toprawa
  • This statement is not introduced so well. How does he know there will be Jedi in the upcoming battle? Did he see them? This is begging for explanation. Please clarify: "and ordered his group to leave the Jedi for him to eliminate."
    • When he's addressing the villagers, as Sah and his troops descend the cliff, Gaan says this, but it's not stated how he could have seen the Jedi or known he was there.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:39, August 14, 2010 (UTC)
  • Likewise, this sentence is in need of explanation. Are these the remaining clones who were originally sent to the planet with Sah? Or are these a fresh detachment of troops? Please clarify: "Shortly afterward, Gaan and Sah led their fellow pariahs against the troopers who were sent to make sure that Sah was eliminated."
    • Added link to Sev's Star Destroyer, explaining where they came from.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:39, August 14, 2010 (UTC)
  • This can also be fleshed out, I think. Are these attacks taking place on Ragmar V? Are these the same soldiers referenced in the previous objection above? Also, when this did this happen? In the time period immediately following the story? Don't be afraid to give us the meat of the details: "Both men managed to survive and staged a number of hit-and-run attacks against the stormtroopers of the new Galactic Empire." Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:04, August 11, 2010 (UTC)
    • The CSWE actually states that Sah and Gaan staged attacks against the Empire. We can only say for sure that they survived the assault in the story, going by what the entry says, and that they led staged attacks against the Imperials. I'm wondering whether or not to remove stormtroopers and replace it with "forces". The clone troopers immediately became stormies when the Galactic Empire was founded, did they not?—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:39, August 14, 2010 (UTC)
      • CSWE doesn't say that at all. It only says, "Together they managed to stage a number of hit-and-run attacks on the clone troopers," which seems to me to be in direct reference to the preceding sentence in this entry, which reads, "With the help of these criminals, Joc Sah escaped sergeant Remy and his clones..." It says nothing about the Empire, and it seems this is indeed referring to this same group of clones. I would suggest revising this article, as well as the Joc Sah article, to remove mention of the Empire, to reflect only what CSWE says. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:27, August 19, 2010 (UTC)
  • Also, this CSWE entry states that Sah and the criminals "fled into the desert" after escaping Remy and his clones. Please add this to the article. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:27, August 19, 2010 (UTC)
    • Since this contradicts the story, this is added to the BTS, please try it.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 23:11, August 26, 2010 (UTC)
      • Please also state specifically how this contradicts the story, because as far as I can see, from what the article tells me at present, that bit of information could be worked into the story. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:16, August 27, 2010 (UTC)
Xd1358
  • Could you merge the second sentence of the intro? It seems a bit short.
  • "As Gaan prepared to do battle.." To /do/ battle? Please reword. :P
    • I'm striking this, since Tope told me on IRC that to do battle is valid, but I'll leave it up to you if you want to change this to a smoother (IMO) version. :D -- 1358 (Talk) 18:31, August 31, 2010 (UTC)
  • That's all. -- 1358 (Talk) 17:59, August 31, 2010 (UTC)
Minor objection!!!!
  • A play-by-play sentence that the article could do without --- "Gaan stated that he and the Padawan shared a common enemy and that his group was all Sah had." The sentences surrounding this are probably enough to convey that info. Menkooroo 01:08, September 2, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:05, September 3, 2010 (UTC)