Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Flashpoint (planet)

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Flashpoint (planet)

  • Nominated by: NAYAYEN:TALK 13:38, July 27, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The sun smells too loud.

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. To me, this is clean. Excellent work, Nayayen, keep this up.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 01:59, July 29, 2010 (UTC)
  2. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 23:48, July 30, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Great Job, keep up the good work!DarthRageLeave a message after the beep
  4. ACvote Cylka-talk- 02:07, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
  5. See my comment below. -- 1358 (Talk) 20:08, August 20, 2010 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Please feel free to contribute this article to WookieeProject Astrography. :) Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:24, August 20, 2010 (UTC)
    • Definitely, but you still beat me to an article for O-7 =P NAYAYEN:TALK 23:29, August 20, 2010 (UTC)
  7. ACvote Removed the bit about Yavin in the intro, since it was exclusive to there and wasn't really needed, IMO. Chack Jadson (Talk) 20:24, August 21, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Cylka
  • Was the length of Flashpoint's year due to it being a recent arrival to the system or were the two not related? I was a bit unclear on that.
    • JJM has said that it is. Is there a specific part that could be tweaked? NAYAYEN:TALK 20:28, August 17, 2010 (UTC)
      • No, it's fine. It was more my problem than the wording.
  • The proximity to its star also meant that the barren surface of the planet—constantly bombarded by stellar radiation—was extremely arid and lacked an atmosphere of any kind, leaving it void of life. - Using both "barren" and "void of life" in this sentence seems unnecessary to me.
    • "Barren" removed.
  • Did the sources state that Demagol experimented specifically on Jedi Knights, or just on Jedi in general? Please make sure that the intro and main body agree with each other.
    • Don't know where the Knights part came from, removed.
  • Calling Jarael a party member sounds a bit too much like a gaming term.
    • Changed.
  • You should link to the Battle of Flashpoint Station in some way since this was an important part of the history of the planet.
    • Linked.
  • Since the infobox states that the population consisted primarily of Humans, you should include that info in the article body.
    • Done.
  • Should an article be created for Demagol's experimentation room?
    • I don't think it is necessary; it can just as easily be a paragraph in the Flashpoint Station article.
      • Sure. We can always create one later if needed.
  • Please make sure that you link everything possible and that you link to specific articles and not disambig pages.
    • I think I've caught the missing and incorrect ones.
  • I hope you don't mind that I made a few wording adjustments. If you are unsatisfied with them, please change. Otherwise, I found this to be an interesting article. Cylka-talk- 04:16, August 15, 2010 (UTC)
    • The changes are okay with me, thanks for reading and reviewing, Cylka. NAYAYEN:TALK 20:28, August 17, 2010 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • In the infobox, you identify the Mandalorian Neo-Crusaders as an affiliate group; in the intro, you refer to "Mandalorian warriors." Would it be appropriate to pipelink the Neo-Crusaders into that reference?
    • Yes, and done.
  • Can we specify who established this magnetic field, rather than just saying it "was established"? "A small area of Flashpoint was made habitable when a magnetic field was set up on the surface."
    • Done, including a small mention of the Research Station to give some context.
  • I feel like this mention of the Neo-Crusaders is dropped into the article rather late and without much description. I think it would be appropriate to introduce their presence on Flashpoint somewhere earlier in the History section: "one that the remaining Neo-Crusaders fled aboard." Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:39, August 20, 2010 (UTC)
    • Mentioned earlier and used throughout on a few more occasions. Thanks for reviewing, Tope. Please say if anything else needs fixing. NAYAYEN:TALK 23:11, August 20, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:24, August 21, 2010 (UTC)


  • I have only two minor question, that won't stop me from supporting:
    • In the Bts, could you give some kind of release date for the comics?
      • Contradictory as it may seem, I don't want to turn the Bts into a list of release dates and there isn't anywhere that they can be easily put in without doing so.
    • In the Bts as well, could you place Miller's comment after the mention of the short story? First you have Miller, then sourcebook appearances, and then again Miller—confusing. -- 1358 (Talk) 20:08, August 20, 2010 (UTC)
      • It's more a case of "appearances" followed by "authorial intent". It sounds just as odd if moved around, in my opinion. NAYAYEN:TALK 23:11, August 20, 2010 (UTC)
        • I'm fine with that. -- 1358 (Talk) 20:30, August 21, 2010 (UTC)