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First

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:55, April 25, 2011 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Very nice. Guest nom for WP:LE? Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:35, April 28, 2011 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Kilson(Let's have a chat) 00:51, May 5, 2011 (UTC)
  4. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 19:55, May 11, 2011 (UTC)
    • See objection below. 1358 (Talk) 19:58, May 11, 2011 (UTC)
  5. ACvote—Tommy 9281 Thursday, May 12, 2011, 00:08 UTC

Object

Lee attacks
  • Female should be written small.
    • Addressed.
  • Context needed for the Lost Tribe of Sith in the bio.
    • Addressed.
  • Otherwise nice. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:37, April 25, 2011 (UTC)
Jujiggum
  • Just one: You did say the s18 was en route from Eriadu when Ship attacked it, right? Do you think it's worth mentioning in the article just that they were en route from Eriadu when they came under attack? Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:14, April 28, 2011 (UTC)
Kilson
  • If the planet the ship crash landed on is "Unidentified" I would recommend creating a article for it, or at least leaving a redlink.
    • Well, that's a bit of a problem; the planet is never specified, but we know that it is at least near, or could potentially very well be, B'nish or Eriadu. I'm not sure making a link for an unidentified planet would be the best idea, since we don't even know for a fact that it's unidentified. Thoughts?—Axinal Convocation Chamber 00:27, May 5, 2011 (UTC)
      • Then you probably shouldn't create an article in that case. However, you should mention in the Bts that the short story doesn't specify /which/ planet "First" crashed on.
  • To go along with the previous objection, in the Intro, "However, the starship fell under attack by the Sith Meditation Sphere Ship and was forced to make an emergency landing." You should mention the Unidentified planet here like you did in the Bio.
    • For this objection, you can still say, "...made an emergency landing on a nearby planet..." or something along those lines. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 00:40, May 5, 2011 (UTC)
  • Otherwise, nice job Axinal. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 00:21, May 5, 2011 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • The phrase en route should always contain the destination, like "en route from Coruscant to Alderaan" or "en route to Alderaan". You'll have to reword both instances in the article if the destination is unknown. 1358 (Talk) 19:58, May 11, 2011 (UTC)
    • I'm not sure about that. The phrase "en route from Eriadu" is used in the story, without the destination.—Axinal Convocation Chamber 20:07, May 11, 2011 (UTC)
      • Hmm, strange OS. I'd still, however, consider it good if it was changed to something like "After departing from the planet of Eriadu" instead, for clarification's sake. 1358 (Talk) 19:49, May 16, 2011 (UTC)
No Strength Where Peace Lies
  • No article for the emergency-landing planet? "...emergency landing on a nearby planet."
    • Please see Kilson's objections above, as this has been a matter of some debate for me personally, and I'd like to hear your opinion on the matter.
  • "A female Human from B'nish, "First"—as she was later named—" You can start this differently, and introduce her identity as "First" later. It kinda jars the prose where that introduction currently is.
    • Changed.
  • In that same passage you indicate that the girl was from B'nish, which is not also shown in the infobox. Please add it if the distinction is specifically made, otherwise that part of the sentence also needs altering.
    • Perhaps from B'nish was poor wording, as the girl mentions that she was a slave at/in/on B'nish, but that does not necessarily mean it is her homeworld. I've altered the sentence.
      • The fact that we don't know what type of location B'nish is creates a difficulty with the sentence, actually, as we can't definitively say that she was a slave on B'nish as opposed to at or in B'nish. Thoughts?—Axinal Convocation Chamber 23:59, May 11, 2011 (UTC)
  • That's all, good work.—Tommy 9281 Wednesday, May 11, 2011, 23:45 UTC

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 15:59, May 18, 2011 (UTC)


  • The image quality isn't that great, but it was the best I could do with my scanner. If anyone with the magazine and a greater affinity for image uploading, a clearer image would be nice.—Axinal Convocation Chamber 22:12, April 24, 2011 (UTC)
  • I was reading through Allies recently and I discovered there is an indirect mention of "First" in the novel. There is no new information except for the fact that you will have to make a few changes to the Bts and Appearance list. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 22:54, May 6, 2011 (UTC)
    • Cool, thanks for informing me, Kilson. I have the book, so if you could give me the page number that would be great. Thanks!—Axinal Convocation Chamber 22:59, May 6, 2011 (UTC)
    • Found something on 16 about Vestara feeling off-guard the first time she had killed, etc. Article has been updated accordingly. I've added a 1stm and an Imo template; do you think I should add a 1stid to "First Blood"? Thanks again!—Axinal Convocation Chamber 23:23, May 6, 2011 (UTC)
      • No problem, I was just glad I noticed it. And yeah, you should probably put (First identified as First) or something along those lines. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 00:42, May 7, 2011 (UTC)