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Faie

  • Nominated by: --Vitus InfinitusTalk 05:47, 23 March 2022 (UTC)
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Support

  1. Nice work! Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 10:06, 18 April 2022 (UTC)
  2. ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 19:31, 22 April 2022 (UTC)
  3. — Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 16:47, 1 May 2022 (UTC)
  4. ACvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 02:56, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Interesting design. OOM 224 12:21, 19 May 2022 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 23:44, 21 May 2022 (UTC)
  7. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 09:10, 22 May 2022 (UTC)

Object

Braie
  • The article talks about Vos leading a campaign on Kashyyyk prior to the Battle of Kashyyyk. It feels notable enough for an article to me, unless there's already an article you can link?
    • The source doesn't treat that as different from the Battle of Kashyyyk, I've reworded to better reflect that. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:49, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
      • I still don't see how the article doesn't differentiate the two from each other. I'd either link the Battle of Kashyyyk earlier, or create an article that actually covers this campaign. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 12:36, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
  • "Following the failed assassination attempt on Master Yoda by Clone Commander CC-1004 "Gree" of the 41st Elite Corps and Clone Captain "Jek" of the Ranger Corps, Commander Faie was able to quickly regroup the Republic forces and secured a final victory." First of all, clarification of what the victory was over (the Jedi or the Separatists) would be beneficial. And secondly, I think it should be mentioned that Gree and Jek were killed so the reader can better understand why Faie took up the job of regrouping the forces.
    • The source doesn't specify what the final victory was, and added --Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:49, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
      • Well we know that the battle was between the Republic and the Separatists, and looking at Linwodo's article, it's suggested that the regrouping led to his defeat. I think both factors should be reflected. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 12:36, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
        • Reworded and added a bit more context per Battles that Changed the Galaxy. Let me know if it needs further adjustment. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 17:52, 15 April 2022 (UTC)
  • "Vos' fate became unknown." From Vader issue 7 (2017 series), we know that Vos was presumed to have survived by the Empire. I think that should be added on. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 18:56, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
  • "and was joined by Jedi Grand Master Yoda from Coruscant and Jedi General Quinlan Vos from Boz Pity in 19 BBY." The wording makes it unclear whether the locations are their last place of operations, their home bases or even their homeworlds. Considering where Quinlan Vos and Yoda came from is not that much relevant to Faie, unless he's serving under one of their units, I just say it's better to remove those altogether (and it saves you having to give them context :P). Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 17:56, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
Erebus
  • Full release date for Episode III, since Republic 74 was released in the same year.
  • I don't really like doing these, but there's a duplicate link in the body.
  • The Battle of Kashyyyk should have a date included.
  • That last sentence in paragraph 2 in the Biography seems a little bit like a run-on to me. The previous sentence could still be used to briefly explain the Grand Army's orders to kill their Jedi like done on Linwodo.
    • The second paragraph in "Kashyyyk and Order 66"? I've reworded some stuff but let me know if it needs further fixes. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 17:52, 15 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Seeing a small bit of underlinking in the Biography.
  • Although it's similarly applied to Kassius Konstantine, the current wording of this article seems to suggest that Faie was part of Vos's unit. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 05:28, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Unfortunately there isn't further context, and the wording is straight from the source which says that Vos was Faie's general during Kashyyyk. I don't want to make the assumption in favor of Faie being in Vos's unit, but I'm not sure how I can reword it. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 17:52, 15 April 2022 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • Please format Ref 1 a la Mixer. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 07:29, 18 April 2022 (UTC)
  • That BTS image should either be reduced in size or switched out for another suitable image, since it is currently impacting everything below it. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 03:46, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Okay, how is it now? --Vitus InfinitusTalk 18:47, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
      • Hmm. On my display, removing the image allows the Gentle Giant link and 1stm template to fit on one line. I don't know if that's the case on your end. I think I'd avoid using an image there at all. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 03:30, 30 April 2022 (UTC)
        • It's in one line on my end. I'd think that it's beneficial to show Faie's concept art from the film if possible. I can try shortening the caption even more? --Vitus InfinitusTalk 18:37, 30 April 2022 (UTC)
          • No need now, differing displays are tricky to accommodate. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 13:29, 1 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Grand Army of the Republic is intro-exclusive.
  • Kachirho needs context.
  • You have a duplicate ref in the second paragraph of "Kashyyyk and Order 66."
  • Instead of awkwardly mentioning the bust's release after the ROTS info, please mention it when first discussing the bust.
  • Reviewing note: My copy-edit, in which I've had to add several missing links. This is something I've noticed in the majority of your nominations, despite the fact that you have been nominating articles longer than I have. Please make sure to proofread the article at least once more before nomination in order to catch issues like these and some of the objections I've made above. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 04:53, 9 May 2022 (UTC)
    • This is definitely an issue I have, I really am sorry. I'll make sure to proofread multiple times, thank you for letting me know --Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:16, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
OOM
  • Good work. Just a few things from me:
    • Per precedent, there's no need to provide context for Jango Fett in the P&T section if there's already context for him in the Biography.
    • "Quinlan Vos, who was not by-the-book" — in the interest of not repeating things, it would be nice if you could use another term here.
    • The image captions say he used customised armor, but this info is missing from the prose itself. OOM 224 12:13, 17 May 2022 (UTC)
Ecks
  • ~"Faie" was a clone trooper with the military rank of Clone Commander. Commander Faie was one of many commanders" Would it be possible to reword this to avoid the consecutive instances of "Commander"? 1358 (Talk) 18:02, 19 May 2022 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • Given the introduction of Sister, I'm not sure we should be assuming all clones are male just based on the DB entry so I'd reference it to the statue's webpage instead since it uses pronouns for him. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:43, 21 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Need context for Salecami in the intro. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:43, 21 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 09:10, 22 May 2022 (UTC)


  • Fully updated with Gentle Giant information. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:46, 23 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Updated with Behind the Scenes information from the film's production --Vitus InfinitusTalk 06:00, 8 May 2022 (UTC)