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Eroudac
- Nominated by: DarthRuiz30 (talk) 04:22, 26 July 2021 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: For WP:GE-WP:AST
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Support
- Lovely work. Minnabird
(talk) 05:24, 29 July 2021 (UTC) - Nice. JediMasterMacaroni
(Talk) 17:39, 29 July 2021 (UTC) 
UberSoldat93 
(talk) 21:10, 5 August 2021 (UTC)- OOM 224 09:31, 10 August 2021 (UTC)
- 1358 (Talk) 16:47, 10 August 2021 (UTC)
Object
Macaroni
The contraction should be removed, they're discouraged in formal writing.- I believe that should be done
Some context for Izal in the intro would be nice.- Added
History could use some subsectioning, which will make room for another quote.- Done
There's no need to refer to Izal by her full name as much as you do, just using her last name should be fine.- Reduced the use
"Izal expressed that Eroudac was the last place where she lived with her parents and that the planet had ancient ruins and a pink moon, Rakab agreed to go on the date once his ship got repaired." Why did Izal express this, exactly? In order to convince him?JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:16, 26 July 2021 (UTC)
- Rewritten--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 22:10, 26 July 2021 (UTC)
I think you'll need an additional {{Cite web}} citation for the anagram, maybe with some sort of anagram website.JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 01:02, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
- Done--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 07:47, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
Minnabird
"The planet counted with a local law enforcement agency capable of issuing citations and grant landing permits." I get the gist, but this isn't the right verb for the job and I'm not sure which one you meant to use. (Also, this isn't an objection, but did an editing pass for some grammatical issues and a few points that were unclear). Minnabird (talk) 18:13, 28 July 2021 (UTC)- My brain used the verb we commonly use in spanish. Let me know if that's better.--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 04:44, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
If "Galactic Politics" capitalized in the book, then it can get an article of its own, per the existence of other such pages.UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:48, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
- Done--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 20:50, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
Kat Saka either needs some sort of context or be changed to a pipelink ("a skirmish at a local farm" or whatever).1358 (Talk) 20:39, 9 August 2021 (UTC)- Done--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 21:25, 9 August 2021 (UTC)
OOM
Instead of repeating that Eroudac was a Mid Rim planet between the Description and History sections, I think it would be better to take the info out of History's first sentence.- Removed
"The planet had a local law enforcement agency capable of issuing citations and granting landing permits." — this information has more to do with the Description section so it's best if it's moved there. The next sentence in History shouldn't be affected by the move.- Moved
"The Eroudac Citadel was a residence where the Garsea family lived during their stay on Eroudac until Izal Garsea decided to leave" — Just to clarify, this sentence indicates the Garsea family stopped lived at the citadel after Izal's departure, which I don't see mentioned elsewhere in the article. Is this correct, or would it be clearer and more accurate to just cut out the rest of the sentece after "stay on Eroudac"?OOM 224 07:30, 10 August 2021 (UTC)- Changed--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 09:23, 10 August 2021 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 16:47, 10 August 2021 (UTC)