Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Eron (soldier)

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Eron

• Nominated by: DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 02:00, June 30, 2013 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:For Project Novels

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 01:22, July 16, 2013 (UTC)
2. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 11:02, July 24, 2013 (UTC)
3. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:58, July 31, 2013 (UTC)
4. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:33, August 18, 2013 (UTC)
5. Cade Calrayn 01:37, August 18, 2013 (UTC)

Object

SE

• Intro
  • Can you add a date for the renewed war in the first line?
    • Added.
  • Can you mention that Kalandis Seven is a planet?
    • Mentioned.
  • Same objection regarding the "Battle of Kalandis Seven" being a conjectural title.
    • Re-worded.
      • Just so you know, I reworded those parts slightly, feel free to change it if you don't like it. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:10, July 1, 2013 (UTC)
• Biography
  • Date for the renewed war?
    • Added.
  • Can you mention that Keioidian was a member of their squad? Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:24, July 1, 2013 (UTC)
    • Mentioned. DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 04:07, July 1, 2013 (UTC)

El Jefe

• In your Yennir of the Green article you mention that Kalandis Seven was "covered in fog". It might be useful to also do so here.
  • Mentioned.
• The intro seems a little too thick with detail to me. It doesn't have to be cut down much, but it should be somewhat. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 02:43, July 11, 2013 (UTC)
  • Cut out some info. DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 05:00, July 11, 2013 (UTC)

Toprawa

• I don't understand why you detail Malcolm's mission to take the command ship in this article but omit it from the Yennir article, which I found to be practical, since his objective seems quite extraneous from the squad's. Unless there's a good reason for including it here, I would suggest removing it from this article. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:03, July 18, 2013 (UTC)
  • Removed. DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 01:31, July 19, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:38, August 18, 2013 (UTC)