Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Eol Sha lichen (second nomination)

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Eol Sha lichen

• Nominated by: NaruHina ^Talk 21:20, 7 May 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: It was deGA'd becuase it was not 250 words....251! Well. Fine, not anymore. =P

(3 ACs/5 Users/8 Total)

Support

1. Good job. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi beacon)} 23:28, 7 May 2009 (UTC)
2. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 16:36, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
3. CC7567 ^(talk) 18:49, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
4. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 11:55, 14 May 2009 (UTC)
5. Master Jonathan^{Jedi Council Chambers} 00:54, 24 May 2009 (UTC)
6. After a hefty copy-edit to cut down on too much extraneous detail. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:35, 29 May 2009 (UTC)
7. --Darth tom (Imperial Intelligence) 11:23, 31 May 2009 (UTC)
8. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 23:48, 1 June 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. Info unique to intro. In fact, in the process moving much of the info from the intro to a fresh "History" section, you removed a ref note in the intro to the Jedi Academy Sourcebook, so there's also unsourced info. There's info in the lead quote not present in the article, and an italicization issue in the BtS. This should be much more than 251 words long. And it would be nice to see a little care and thought taken with GA noms. -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 21:27, 7 May 2009 (UTC)
   • I've added the description section and all info that I can see that was part of the sourcebook was also in the novel itself. NaruHina ^Talk 03:03, 8 May 2009 (UTC)
2. The Grand Master
   • There is some info unique to the intro, be sure to add it into the main body.
   • "Using the Force in a way he had been able to many times before" This is a little awkward and unclear, please reword.
   • The History section ends a little abruptly, mention briefly what this "second test" was.
   • Add the release date of Jedi Search in the Bts.
     • This particular objection isn't required of FAs/GAs; just wanted to let you know that. It's up to the nominator on whether he includes it or not. CC7567 ^(talk) 22:33, 7 May 2009 (UTC)
       • Ok, thanks for letting me know. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi beacon)} 23:28, 7 May 2009 (UTC)
   • Good job. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi beacon)} 21:30, 7 May 2009 (UTC)
3. Floyd:
   • Contextify Gantoris upon first mention.
   • Mention that Luke was trying to get Gantoris to join the Academy earlier.
   • Does his second test (with the lava) really relate to this article about the lichen?
   • Nice job. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 01:47, 8 May 2009 (UTC)
     • Done. Thank you for reviewing the article. NaruHina ^Talk 03:03, 8 May 2009 (UTC)
4. Attack of the Clone
   • "It was protected by the extreme heat by growing in deep crevasses within the geysers." Unclear as to what "it" is.
     • I'm not seeing how, the subject of the previous sentence is crystal clear. NaruHina ^Talk 13:13, 8 May 2009 (UTC)
   • Saying "that quest" is a bit awkward; makes it sound like it was a different quest.
     • Done NaruHina ^Talk 13:13, 8 May 2009 (UTC)
   • What was the use of seeing if Skywalker would be caught in the boiling water and super-heated steam?
     • Clairified. NaruHina ^Talk 13:13, 8 May 2009 (UTC)
       • Bit of a run-on. CC7567 ^(talk) 15:58, 8 May 2009 (UTC)
         • Fixed. NaruHina ^Talk 18:25, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
   • Looks fine otherwise. CC7567 ^(talk) 03:16, 8 May 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 15:46, 3 June 2009 (UTC)