- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Elke Vetter
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
- SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 05:04, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
Cylka-talk- 05:46, 11 March 2009 (UTC)- Why not?--Jedi Kasra (talk) 17:55, 17 March 2009 (UTC)
Graestan(Talk) 14:18, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 14:50, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
Object
- Soresu
using the information to decide that she could let Marasiah lead her to her father or he would come to save her. Can this be reworded? The flow is a bit messed up.- How's that?
Talon used the Force to interrogate Vetter Used the Force in what way? Torture, or mind tricks?- Mentioned :).
The fact that she gave in to Talon's interrogation should be in the P&T.SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 11:14, 4 March 2009 (UTC)
- Cylka:
Why were they hiding in the Imperial Mission temple?- Addressed.
I believe the paragraph would flow a bit better if you mentioned that Krayt ordered Talon to kill Roan Fel before going into how they were hiding in the temple on Socorro.- Moved things around a little, how's it looking now? :)
If you are going to mention Talon's promotion to Krayt's Hand, then Hand needs a bit more context.- Contextified.
I would change the wording around a bit in either the intro or the article proper so that both paragraph don't read word for word. I believe it will give the article a better flow.- Changed.
- Another well done article, Grunny! Cylka-talk- 11:34, 9 March 2009 (UTC)
- Graestan the Merciless:
- From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
"In Star Wars Legacy 13: Ready to Die, Roan Fel tells Darth Kruhl that all Imperial Knights are equipped with cortosis gauntlets, which deactivate lightsabers on contact, however, Vetter's hand is severed through her gauntlet." - I understand why you put this in the BTS, but I don't think it's relevant. The issuing of cortosis gauntlets could easily have been done at some point after Vetter's death, she might not have gotten the memo, etc.- Good point, it has been removed.
- Nice job, Grunny. Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 23:40, 27 March 2009 (UTC)
Comments
- Is there a picture of Talon killing Vetter with Force lightning? If so, maybe it should be added. If not, then it needs to be uploaded. I put this here because it's not an objection, just a suggestion.--Jedi Kasra (talk) 17:55, 17 March 2009 (UTC)
- Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 14:50, 29 March 2009 (UTC)