- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Eddel
- Nominated by: --Eyrezer 13:00, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Classic WEG goodness
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
- ~ SavageBob 19:29, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
- Imperialles 22:45, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
CC7567 (talk) 01:32, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:47, May 7, 2010 (UTC)
Happened upon this while browsing the RCs.—Tommy 9281 20:58, May 7, 2010 (UTC)
Object
Three things:- Intro: "Having been prominent traders throughout the Trax sector under the Galactic Republic, they were decimated in a war against its successor, the Galactic Empire, and as a result, their number was reduced to a few thousand sentients, which were forced into slavery." A lot of commas here. Any way you can reword the sentence?
- History: "a pleasant planet" Pleasant for who? This seems a little POV.
Eddel/Eddelians: If the singular form is Eddel, shouldn't that be used as the species' ethnonym instead of "Eddelian"? Examples from the article: "Eddelian starships, carrying Eddelian traders"; "Most Eddelian technology".- Other than that, good stuff. --Imperialles 19:38, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
- Changed the first two and discussed the third over IRC. --Eyrezer 22:39, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 14:33, May 8, 2010 (UTC)